It was another nice evening although the temperature had fallen. Julie and Victor were hunting and this time they were going to the Bull Moose Club. It was a large country western club. Julie and Victor loved to dance. Wearing western garb, they were dressed for the part. With Aspasia dead, they had gone back to their usual routine. They intended to entice a young attractive woman to the ranch and devour her.1
"I can't help worrying that Aspasia might come back," said Julie concerned.2
"I can't deny the possibility that she may be able to come back. I am not certain a vampire can be killed. Many have tried to kill me."3
"You're encouraging," she said half humorously. "What flavor do you want tonight, blonde, redhead, brunette, blue or green?"4
He laughed, "The green haired women taste funny."5
They pulled into the parking lot.6
Victor could dematerialize, hypnotize, and drain the blood of any young woman he wanted, but that was no sport. He had learned he enjoyed the excitement of enticing women to the deaths. He preferred the raw emotion and physical responses a woman not in a trance which she displayed as he took her sexually and drank her blood. There was a much greater thrill and even the blood of such women seemed to have a better taste.7
"You know I like blondes," he smiled. Julie was a light colored blonde. She squeezed his hand lovingly.8
They went into the crowded club into an atmosphere of fun and excitement. Immediately they began to share in the feeling. They managed to find an open table further from the dance floor than they liked, but near to the bar. They decided to dance for a while.9
Victor and Julie were great dancers and many of the other couples took notice. Victor was about 6'2", 220lbs, dark hair and nearly black haunting eyes. Julie was 5'6", sky blue eyes and slim. Victor preferred slim women. Julie was human. She was up to now the only woman Victor had spared since he became a vampire ages ago. For food, Victor only preyed on young women. It was wrapped up in his sexuality. He was very much heterosexual. He would have sex with his victims and then drain them of their blood until they died. He purposely did not leave survivors. He did not want to create more vampires. Since he had taken Julie as a companion and sex partner, he had less need for sex and less desire for blood; but he still needed blood about every couple of weeks. He was nearly famished tonight.10
They returned to the table. They had been dancing quite a while. Julie usually played a key role in attracting their victims. "Do you see anyone you like?" she asked patiently.11
Victor often enjoyed viewing prospective women for a while before he would settle on a target. They always got the one he chose. Sometimes he would let Julie decide. She enjoyed the thrill of the hunt, the sex, and the kill almost as much as the vampire now, although at first she had been often reluctant. She had changed into an entirely different creature since she had met him.12
Almost simultaneously they both focused on a young woman sitting at the end of the bar. She was about Julie's size, dark hair, early twenties, wearing a blue plaid western shirt, jeans, boots and a western belt. Teressa was tooled into her belt. They couldn't see her eyes, but what they did see of her was perfect. Without asking, Julie knew that the vampire wanted her. There was a unique quality about her, an aura, that drew their attention; though they didn't know why. They both felt it.13
"Her," said Victor simply.14
They studied her for a while. She appeared to be alone which was unusual for a woman. Men approached her like she was a bitch in heat trying to get her to dance, but she stayed at the bar. The bartender stayed close to see that she wasn't bothered.15
Finally, Julie went to the bar and sat beside her. "Rough night," she hazarded. 16
The young woman whose eyes were hazel, almost blue, was well on her way to becoming soused. "Did you know that I am twenty-six and still a virgin," she said almost tearfully.17
Julie hadn't known, of course; and truthfully it surprised her. She had never known a twenty-six year old virgin. "That's not such a bad thing."18
"My ex-fiancee thinks it is. He broke up with me tonight."19
"It's no big thing, really, losing your virginity."20
"It is to me, I am a Christian," she said taking another gulp.21
"Is he a Christian?"22
"I think so," she said puzzling on the thought.23
"I think it is important to stand on what you believe, but maybe your are making to big a thing out of it."24
"I don't. He could wait three more months."25
"I guess he could," Julie agreed. "Is he a virgin."26
"No."27
"Why don't you come over to our table and get another man's opinion."28
"Okay." she said and nearly tripped as she made her way to their table.29
Julie said to the bartender, "We will look after her." Suspecting nothing wrong, the bartender made no effort to stop them. He had planned to call her a cab.30
"Your belt says 'Teressa'. Is that you name?"31
"Yes."32
"This is Victor. Victor, Teressa. She's a Christian and a virgin. She's saving herself for marriage."33
Victor was taken aback, in fact; he was amazed. In his life he had not had a virgin her age. He was impressed with her fortitude and conviction. So was Julie. Like a fisherman who cast the fish back in the water after a good fight, he was tempted to throw her back. She had his immediate respect. She was one of the prettiest women he had chosen, and he had had many of the best. He wondered how in the world she had maintained her virginity in America. In fact, accept for a nun or some kind of nut he was not sure there had ever been a twenty-six year old virgin. At least not one as beautiful as she.34
"You're not some kind of lesbian are you?" he inquired.35
"No," she sniffed. "Even you think I am strange."36
"No, I have never met a women with such dedication before," said Victor. "I am beginning to wonder if I have met a real Christian before."37
That made her feel encouraged and she visibly brightened. It made her appear almost angelic.38
"Her fiancee dumped her because she wouldn't put out," said Julie flatly with a touch of anger.39
"How long have you been engaged?" asked Victor.40
"Six months."41
"How long to go?"42
"Three months."43
Now Victor was pissed. "He could have waited," he said with no doubt in his voice. He had no respect for the man. He had killed men for less.44
"You really feel that way?" Teressa asked unbelievingly.45
"Definitely. You are very lucky to be rid of him. He didn't deserve you." Victor actually felt sympathy for her, and that was rare. She had already won his respect. That, too, was rare.46
"He will come back to you, but don't marry him. You deserve better."47
"But who? I love him."48
"Love someone else," said Victor, "If a man can respect your virginity for six months and can't hold out for three more, you can't trust him and his love is not true."49
Julie was surprised at the truth in what Victor said and she could see the shock in Teressa's face as she realized what he was saying was true. She was also surprised at his attitude toward Teressa. In some ways she was jealous.50
Victor completely took over. Usually Julie helped to entrap the victims. "You are in no shape to be alone. You can stay with us tonight and we will take you home in the morning."51
Teressa did not argue. They left the club and drove to the ranch.52
Julie helped her to bed in one of the other bedrooms. Julie and Victor went to bed and began to cuddle.53
"What are you going to do with her?" she asked. She knew this woman was different.54
"I don't think I have met a woman with such conviction before," he replied. "Besides, she is too polluted to be any good now."55
They made love.56
In the morning Teressa was so hung over she could barely walk. "I am sorry I vomited in the bed."57
"No problem," said Julie. "You were asleep and couldn't help it. It will clean up."58
"I'll help you," she volunteered listlessly.59
"No. I want you to lay down and get some more rest in one of the other bedrooms. I will take care of it. Besides, Victor would like you to stay for dinner. He wants to talk with you some more."60
Teressa obediently went back to bed and rested. She got up early afternoon feeling almost cheerful, as though a weight had been lifted. "You have been extremely kind to me," she told Julie.61
"You have made a definite and unusual impression on us, and Victor wants to know you better. Julie still assumed Victor would rape and kill Teressa, but it was not the time for Teressa to know. Victor never left survivors.62
Although Victor was usually nocturnal by habit, he could be up during the day. Today he was into his usual habit and was intending to sleep until dusk. His eyes were sensitive to the sun. He had gone without feeding and woke feeling famished.63
Julie and Teressa had gone riding and it was her first time. She was from Southwest Minnesota. She had been frightened of horses, but with a little encouragement and coaching from Julie she was proving a natural horsewoman.64
She was quite excited to when they sat down to dinner.65
"Promise me, you will rethink your marriage. He will be back, but he is not worthy of you." Victor demanded. Julie's mouth nearly dropped open.66
Teressa was surprised at his manner and statement, but after a moment she said simply in a childlike fashion, "I promise."67
"Good."68
"Now let's discuss your faith."69
He continued, "What if I could prove that Jesus did not die on the cross?"70
"How would you do that?"71
"That is not an answer to my question."72
She pondered carefully choosing her words, "He would still be my Lord and Savior."73
"Why?"74
No one had ever challenged her faith like this. She knew he was not being mean, he was trying to understand her. She was forced to try to understand herself.75
"Let me put it another way. If I could show you flaws in the Bible, would you still believe that the whole book is true?"76
Teressa finally answered. "I don't know if the whole Bible is true or without flaw, although I have believed that it was. I believe that what it teaches is true. Even if it is flawed, I believe that what it teaches is the closest to God's truth I can come. If Jesus did not die on the cross, he would still be my Lord and Savior because I believe in His teachings."77
"I agree there is much truth in the Bible," said Victor. "But I also believe there is much about God which can't be found there and can be found from other sources. I do not agree that the Bible is the complete or finite word of God and I feel that such faith is immature and misplaced."78
Julie had nothing to say, they were talking beyond her, but she was learning.79
"Can you prove that Jesus didn't die on the cross?" asked Teressa. Though Julie could answer this, she remained silent.80
"I believe that I can, but for your sake. I cannot. You, yourself believe that he was resurrected, is that much different than believing he did not die on the cross?"81
"What do you believe?" accidentally she had turned the tables.82
"I don't know that he died," admitted Victor. He was surprised. He added, "Ever."83
Julie was shocked by that admission. Julie said, "Ever?"84
So was Victor. Although he knew that Jesus had not died on the cross, he had assumed he had perished after a normal lifetime until now. Victor had assumed that his own disease was the curse of evil. If Jesus really was eternal, might he also have been a vampire? Or if not, might Victor's disease be curable? Was it possible that Jesus continued to walk the earth?85
"I think we will take you to your hotel now. I have some thinking to do. It has been very interesting meeting you. Please give us your address so we can stay in touch."86
Teressa thanked them again for all they had done for her. She honestly believed that Victor had saved her from an awful mistake. She didn't know how close she had come to something worse.87
They dropped her at her hotel and went hunting again. Victor was hardly in control of his appetite. Julie had been silent.88
"You had to let her go," was all she said. She understood without fully understanding.89
They enticed an attractive redhead to come to the ranch. They had sex with her and he gorged on her blood. Then they disposed of her dead body much as they usually did.90
Teressa was the fish he threw back. She had no idea the spiritual battles she had won.91
Author notes
Victor begins the make a change. Photo from Met-art.com
In a list
A contest entry
- When Bad Guys Go Good (A Pay it Forward Contest) by Andrew Timothy.
350 points, ended June 30, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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I liked it
Had a lot of conflicting emotions that played with my heart and hooked me in from start to finish. No wonder this won a trophy but I probably would have given it gold lol
However this is yet another vamp story and I grow weary of their concepts- although yours may be original now it will most likely overlap with another. Please be careful with that- you have placed yourself in a mine-field.
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Hi Violette!
This is one of the tamer stories in this series. Usually there is explicit erotica and a death scene. Actually, the stories in this series become a bit repetitive. I intend at some point to rewrite the entire series to adapt it into a novel. There are more than forty stories in it. I took most of them off the site to rewrite them, but I've started putting some back on. I haven't really done much of the rewriting, yet.
It probably seems funny, but I haven't read any of the famous vampire writers. The only vampire authors I've read are at Storywrite. I wrote most of my series of stories with no exposure to any written vampire stories. I don't think there's probably much reason to worry about it now.
Andy
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Read this one before...enjoyed it twice...see previous comment, and thanks for the entry
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Oops!!
I didn't even bother to check to see if you had read this one, I was so sure that you hadn't. I screwed up. You're hard to keep up with
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Andy
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This was wonderfully written and full of mixed emotion. I enjoyed it all...though i thought it would go another way. Very well done!
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Hi Durian
For me this was a change of pace. I usually kill off the victims. For the series, 'A Hedonistic Vampire' it is a turning point for Victor. He begins to develop a social conscience.
How did you think it would go?
Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding.
Andy
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This has a certain feel to it that I can't quite place. But it's nice. I like it. I must admit, though, that I am getting a bit tired of al lthe vampire stories I keept reading - most of them being submitted to contests I'm hosting. Nonetheless, this was still a good story. Thank you for entering this into the contest.
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Dear Seth
What kind of story would you like. I may have one stashed somewhere or I might be inclined to write one that you would like better. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding.
Andy
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I love Vampire tales. Thanks for sharing this. Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
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Thanks, Brooke
Victor spares a young woman in this story and it is the beginning of a change in him in the series. He begins a religious quest and soul searching. These vampire stories are usually more erotic.
Andy
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A vampire's spiritual quest, very interesting. I had always thought that they were cold and heartless creatures, but this puts them in a new light. Professionaly done and thank you for entering the contest.
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Thanks, Andrew
I had pulled this from the contest pending your approval of its length, but I guess it must have stayed in somehow. Anyway, I posted it again in your contest. From this point in the series of stories, Victor tries to use his power and wealth to promote good. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I hope you have many good entries and a fun time.
Andy
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Thought Provoking
A well written,thought provoking write that I wouldn't have read unless it had captivated my interest.I find Victor fascinating,he professes to wish to learn from the other religions yet is in fact playing God,casting judgement choosing who shall live and who shouldn't.He has not killied Julie who has no virtue,has given in to his desires of the flesh,shown her capacity for bi sexual pleasure and her ability to desensitise herself to the taking of life ,it is if she is enough for him yet not enough,she will do as his accomlplice until he finds what he believes is possible to find.Whilst I was impressed that he let Terresa go free she didn't teach him anything beyond her own need to remain virginal until wed,she didn't teach him to see that all beliefs are worthy if they sustain the spirit yet harm no one in the belief of that name.No religion may be either proven nor disproven,they are all based on a belief that suits the character of the individual per se and endured via faith.Victor states that he is hetrosexual so chooses only women yet is happy for his accomplice to be bi sexual.Victor is the same as men the whole world over,believing that he is not only able to belive that he wants but at the cost of the mortality and morality of others,he chooses to be a predatory judgemental hipocrite doing one thing and making others pay with their lives and feeding his own inadequacy with theirs.There was practically no detail paid to the entrapment of the redhead or her beliefs, it was as if she was used like a kleenex and it belied his manner,his needs,his desires,his decisions above all others.I enjoyed the theological debate,though would have liked it to be longer.As the central character is exploring each religion in turn the author has a chance to educate the reader plus to theorize about the probability and improbaility of every religion.I enjoyed this for it's thought provoking qualities . -
I hate to break the trend, but Victor has discovered that he has a soul. He is becoming morally conscious. He is going to have his own way about it, whenever I decide what that way will be.
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I have my own questions that need answers.....
Can a vampire become good?
Aren't Vampires a soulless creature?
And if so, then wouldn't they need a soul in order to change for the better?
NO soul, no morals....morals are part of what helps us decide good or evil, atleast in my opinion.
I like the way Victor spared this girl. Though I must say when it was stated she was a virgin I thought almost for certain that Victor would torture and torment her to no end then kill her. You really surprised me with this twist.
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Yours is the best comment I received, Immortal. It is a shame you missed out on the contest. Victor is a cold lustful killer and Julie has been becoming like him. Now both of them are beginning a spiritual struggle. The novel is horror/erotica and it is pretty hard core. If you like that, you can check it out under my lists, "A Hedonistic Vampire". The last four chapters have been devoted to his spiritual quest.
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Even though victor is a vampire, morals was still there. Maybe conscience.But indeed he had respect for this woman's conviction and belief.
I liked the idea of the way they looked at who their next flavor of mortal course would be in the beginning of the story. The idea of julie helping or having part in luring his next bloody feast reminded me of the movie "Hellraiser"
There was a woman who was luring male victims to a man who came back from hell(her former lover)with no skin, her name was julia in the movie.
So I thought that was interesting.
It's daunting how very close teressa was in meeting her fate.
So the questions are...
Can a Vampire change?
Can a Vampire become good?
Can a Vampire be forgiven?
Maybe so. But a Vampire will always be a Vampire by way of existence. I believe maybe it was the right answers teressa was giving that made the vampire think twice of taking her life.
Take away those answers....and she would have become another indulging feast, another prey added to the vampires resume.
I think it was teressa who was brave in what she believed in and who taught something to the vampire, but the vampire also has given her a lesson of thought as well.
Sorry I couldn't enter your contest. maybe another time perhaps.
This story I must say, you have done very well.
Thought provoking to the mind of a vampire and mortals alike!!
Nice job!!
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I am glad you like it. I am glad you made it through.
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Thanks Jackle, you might not like the previous chapters, but the ones which follow this one are quite intellectual as Victor and Julie deal with their personal spiritual struggles.
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This is from "A Hedonistic Vampire" in my lists. It is actually about the twenty-fifth chapter and those which follow and the one you read deal with his spiritual struggle. Prior to this, he has been a cold lustful killer. Horror/erotica.
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They go to different bars and in different cities. Sometimes different places. Victor feeds about once ever two weeks and they usually choose tourists. Remember it is fictional. In the chapter, "The Policewoman" they tangle with police. Also in "The Celebrity", there is a hint of the authorities hunting them. You can find them in my lists under "A Hedonistic Vampire."
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I haven't read any of the other chapters. But I am inclined to wonder: When a girl goes missing almost every night, from the same bar, surely the Police get wind of this. With a serial stalker on the loose, people will be on the alert. Do Victor and Julie have to fend off a crimininal investigation as well as undergo their personal spiritual struggles ?
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This is quite the tale you tell here. Enjoyed reading it. I agree that this would make the beginning of a great novel . Will await your second chapter.
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I have started an alien invasion novel, "Invasion of Stagna 3" and I have a historical novel about the oil industry and its influence in modern wars rolling around in my head. The vampire novel is nearing completion. It and my alien novel are in my lists. "A Hedonistic Vampire" is the vampire novel. Horror/Erotica.
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Di, it is actually becoming a novel. There are now about thirty chapters or so. In the earlier chapters there is a lot of horror/erotica. That continues in the following chapters, but the is now the personal spiritual struggles of Victor and Julie. It is in my lists under "A Hedonistic Vampire". This chapter was very tame. I am collaborating with Grizz in the last chapters.
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Hi, well those who clicked and did not read have lost a great story,would very much like to see this expanded into a full novel, I enjoyed this write, I don't normally go for vampire stories even thought have just done my first vampire poem,lol, good write, let me know when the next part is posted, all the best, Di
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I love this. It is a very great story and I was going to enter your contest that is how I found this but I cannot do that cause my story will not come up as a story so I was hoping maybe you could just read my two short stories and just give me your honest opinion on them...if you decide to give it a go they are called DON'T GO TO HOLLOW SPRINGS and LOOKS CAN OFTEN DECIEVE (thanks in advance) anyway to answer your question I think a vampire can change to become good I mean look at Blade lol well it would sure turn the tables and make it very unique besides it is your story you can do what you want...I started writing a story called Mysterious World when I was 13 and did not finnish until I was 16 and as soon as I finnished it I started Mysterious World 2: More Mysterious because I was bored and did not feel like it should have ended there...I am 20 now and I am still working on part 2...and I already have Mysterious World 3: Generation X Next in the works (At least in my head
) Also I loved the way you explain everything from what they wear to their body statisics it is fantastic... keep up the good work
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He started out as a cold rapist and killer, Flip. He has been changing throughout the novel in my list, "A Hedonistic Vampire" Horror/erotica. In the last four chapters he and Julie have begun a spiritual quest and are definitely changing.
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Thanks for the critque, Saraphina. I am definitely weak in that area.
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Umbrae, If you want to read more about the vampire, it is in my novel in my lists, "A Hedonistic Vampire". I must warn you there is a lot of killing and rape, horror/erotica. The last four chapters are about his spiritual quest. Can a vampire change and become good?
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Flo. The vampire has been quite cold and lustful, but he has been changing. In most of the novel there is a lot of Erotica. Rape and killing. In the last four chapters, Victor and Julie, his human companion, are beginning a spiritual struggle and are changing. Can a vampire become good?
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No problem, It is a vampire write if you like those. Thanks for stopping by, Mary.
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You can find the novel, RollingStone, in my list "A Hedonistic Vampire. Julie and Victor are on a spiritual quest in the last four chapters. They are challenging the religious. It was a human which got drunk. The vampire doesn't drink alcohol.
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The last four chapters of my novel "A Hedonistic Vampire" are devoted to Victor and Julie's personal spiritual struggle and search for understanding. Grizz is collaborating and suggested the idea. I am having a marvelous time. The religious against a spiritualist/pantheist.
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This is very interesting. I'm looking forward to future installments. I clicked it expecting one of your country-western greats, but can't say I'm disappointed to find this. Excellent story!!
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I was quite surprised twice when I clicked into this. first, I thought it was a poem, not a story. and second, I had no idea it was a vampire tale. but I am fascinated with vampire lore, so I stayed the course.
I think vampires are sensual, sexy creatures so I was glad to find your story follows that line of thought. I'm not sure what I think of the amount of time spent in the story on the subject of Christian faith. And I'm not sure what I think of vampires getting drunk on booze and having hangovers. that's a new one on me.
I get the distinct impression this is but a chapter in a longer piece. perhaps this is not a story, but a portion of a vampire novel?
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Sorry. I clicked before I looked and didn't know I'd be getting into such a long piece. I'll come back another time..promise.
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Amazing! I loved it! I'm sharing this with all the groups that I'm in! Is there a second one to this?
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Wow i liked this one alot. you have an amazing talent. Thanks so much for sharing your words with all of us here on allpoetry. I look forward to more from you very soon.
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Interesting concept, but some of your word choice is a bit too telling. Instead of saying it was a nice evening, paint the picture of the night. Instead of saying that they were dressed in Western garb, really describe their clothing. Your dialogue is fairly solid, but your descriptive writing could use a bit of punch.
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They went into the crowded club into an atmosphere of fun i would revise this don't use the same word in such close proximatey
That, too, was rare. change it to uncommom rare was just used
They made love.
maybe not the best wording there doesn't apear to be that kind of love between them
i enjoyed this alot i would not suggest having him go completely good but lighten up a bit maybe like only chosing hookers or something to kill or something but not goody two shoes
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It was like a hunter who let the big buck go. Disturbed, I am glad you enjoyed it. He was taken not by her belief, but by her conviction in the truth.
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Andy, yes, I did stay blonde, just not the color that I wanted, so I help it out a little.
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hmmmmm, even the greatest of hunter put some back at time to time. it had to be done, to say the least. a girl like that you don't kill but try to understand, i have to go for today, but i will be back. to read the other's of your work, check you later oh and andy, check out the new chapter of nightfall, alright, check you later
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Mixed, Aspasia is gone, but don't tell anybody. I don't intend to bring her back. I could change my mind.
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It has become a spiritual struggle for Victor and Julie. Lucky, there are two more chapters. I don't know where it is going.
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Did you stay blonde?
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There are two more chapters in Victor and Julie's spiritual struggle now, Alex. I am glad you like the change in direction. I don't know where it is going to go.
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I have begun a collaboration with Grizz. The struggle is now a personal spiritual struggle for Victor and Julie. Thanks, Diamond.
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I am going to be toning down the erotica because Victor and Julie are changing again. It has become a spiritual struggle for them. I am collaborating on these chapters with Grizz. Thanks, Angel.
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It wasn't her innocence, it was her conviction.
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This is a happy ending for the christian girl. I see some inside emotions coming through Victor, could he really have MORALS? Evidently, he has a soft spot for strong determined, yet virgin women. How could he harm such an innocence?
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Andy you know I love your vampire writes. And I did kinda of miss the erotica and such in this piece but your right it is the characters and their personalites that make the story. Keep up the great work I will be checking for the next one. Hope to talk to you soon.
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Wow, that's an interesting turn for this to take, like someone giving up a lifestyle for a completely different one. but, as always, I can't wait to read it.
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I liked the Christian background in this one. I felt that it had a nice tone to it and I was wondering what was going to happen next.
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Wow. I've never encountered a story with so much faith based material. I liked how she was saved because of her faith. Knowing that this wouldn't ever be a problem, but still liking the fact that she won, her faith saved her, and she didn't even realize it. I wonder if faith can save us sometimes without us even realizing it, I don't mean from dying, but maybe from ourselves. I'm just ranting now, but I thought I'd throw that out there...
Good job, I'd like to see some more like this.
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Hey, I was born blonde.
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DAMN! Im so susprised. I love the twist, I wasn't expecting that I can't wait to see what happens next. Hope to see the new one soon.
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This was awesome I loved the twist, I guess love is beging to have an affect on Victor. Very cool! I cant wait to read more and find out what happens with out new guest and as to whether Astasia is really gone! great as always
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It is a radical change which will affect Victor and Julie, and the stories which will follow inspired by Grizz. It is going to become a spiritual struggle.
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Wow, it sounds great that you're planning to do so much with the vampire. I can't wait to see what you accomplish.
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I am considering some changes, Diamond. Gradually. I am not certain he could ever make a complete change, but this is actually the start of book five and there will be changes. It is a collaborative effort. I will credit him if he wants it later. He is a devout Christian and does not care for erotica, but he does illustrations. I think we are working toward a joint venture and a novel and screen play perhaps. It may be quite interesting. I will cut back in the erotica and murder department, but isn't it getting kind of monotonous anyway? The personalities and the hunt are really the meat of the stories, I think. The erotica, frosting on the cake.
As I wrote that, I didn't even know if Teressa would survive. It surprised me. -
wow, that was a really great piece. very intelligent and just a great read, so i guess i can overlook the lack of sex and murder. and that comment about Jesus being a vampire - odd, unique, and really interesting.
i don't mind this different approach at all and i wouldn't mind reading more stuff like this ... i just hope it isn't a permenant change in Victor. -
The woman was brunette. I like all flavors, Vampy. You should know that by now. Besides, most blondes are not true blondes.
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why do all guys like blondes -_-!! i dont fand any hting in them so great.. ut any who like it ^_^
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