The silvery glow peeking through the canopy above was just bright enough to see the outline of a young girl sitting below a tree. She was huddled on the ground, hugging her legs to her chest, and resting her head against her smooth, bare kneecaps. You could see her small, frail body shaking with silent sobs as she wrapped her shawl around herself tighter. The only sound you could hear were the occasional scurrying of feet and snapping of twigs as a small forest animal moved from one place to another. 111
“I didn’t mean to run away,” the girl whispered. “I just didn't understand. I love you mom; I love you dad. I want you back.” But Elsa knew this would never happen, for she was lost in the forest, where no one would ever find her again. 222
She imagined she could hear the voice of her loving mother, calling her name when breakfast was ready, or telling her for the third time to go to bed. Elsa made a silent wish that some miracle would happen, and someone would find her, or she would find her way out, but she knew those were childish wishes. She's already tried to find her way out, with no success, and had screamed herself hoarse for help. She knew now that it was too late, it was too dark for her to find her way out, and most-likely too dark for anyone to see her who was just passing by. And, after all, who would be passing by at this time of night? Besides, Elsa could feel her ankle throbbing in pain, and tried to ignore the warm trickle of liquid on her skin. She wasn't sure exactly what she'd tripped on, but she'd tried to scope around for a way out of the forest when it was getting dark, and now she regretted it. Elsa had tripped on something hard and sharp, which threw her to the ground and caused her to not only get a huge gash, but sprain her ankle as well. With the amount of blood she was losing, Elsa knew she had little chance of surviving through the night. 333
"I didn't mean it. I don't hate you." Elsa whispered aloud. 444
She hoped somehow, by some chance, her parents would be able to hear her, and understand her love for them. She felt a warm feeling behind her eyes and felt the tears come once more as she remembered the last words she's said to her mom: 'I hate you.' She regretted those words almost more than how much she regretted running away. Elsa thought she'd just run away for the day, and then return, now calm, and apologize. But no. She was now sure to die. Elsa suddenly got an idea, and found a sharp rock and carved the words. 'I love you mom and dad, and I didn't mean what I said. I hope you understand,' on the trunk of a tree. Elsa hoped that, by some miracle, her parents, or someone would find her body, and see the message she left on the tree. 555
Crack! Elsa looked up suddenly. "Hello?" she said as loud as she could; but still, her voice came out as no more than a whisper. "Is someone there?" Elsa's blue eyes gleamed with hope as she heard another twig snap. 66
Meow. The kitten walked out from behind the bushes. It was an adorable white and gray kitten with a soft-looking coat and blue-gray eyes that looked very frightened.77
"Are you all alone too?" Elsa whispered to the kitten, as it came near her. "It's okay, I won't hurt you. I bet you're in need of a friend right now just as much as I am."88
The kitten meowed in response.99
"I'm going to name you Destiny." Elsa's voice broke and she grew slightly light-headed from the loss of blood. "Did you run away too?"1010
Destiny blinked twice.1111
"I bet you miss your family. So do I," Elsa said, and the tears she'd been trying so hard to hold back fell freely down her cheeks.1212
Destiny closed the small distance between Elsa and herself, and nudged Elsa's arm lightly with her head.1313
"Oh," Elsa blinked in surprise. "You’re probably cold." Elsa held the kitten lovingly and securely, and shared her shawl with her. 1414
Elsa's vision began to sway, and she knew her time was coming to an end.1515
“Goodbye,” Elsa whispered, as she started to grow faint, and took her last breath. 61616
And there, she fell silent, never to move again.17
“I didn’t mean to run away,” the girl whispered. “I just didn't understand. I love you mom; I love you dad. I want you back.” But Elsa knew this would never happen, for she was lost in the forest, where no one would ever find her again. 222
She imagined she could hear the voice of her loving mother, calling her name when breakfast was ready, or telling her for the third time to go to bed. Elsa made a silent wish that some miracle would happen, and someone would find her, or she would find her way out, but she knew those were childish wishes. She's already tried to find her way out, with no success, and had screamed herself hoarse for help. She knew now that it was too late, it was too dark for her to find her way out, and most-likely too dark for anyone to see her who was just passing by. And, after all, who would be passing by at this time of night? Besides, Elsa could feel her ankle throbbing in pain, and tried to ignore the warm trickle of liquid on her skin. She wasn't sure exactly what she'd tripped on, but she'd tried to scope around for a way out of the forest when it was getting dark, and now she regretted it. Elsa had tripped on something hard and sharp, which threw her to the ground and caused her to not only get a huge gash, but sprain her ankle as well. With the amount of blood she was losing, Elsa knew she had little chance of surviving through the night. 333
"I didn't mean it. I don't hate you." Elsa whispered aloud. 444
She hoped somehow, by some chance, her parents would be able to hear her, and understand her love for them. She felt a warm feeling behind her eyes and felt the tears come once more as she remembered the last words she's said to her mom: 'I hate you.' She regretted those words almost more than how much she regretted running away. Elsa thought she'd just run away for the day, and then return, now calm, and apologize. But no. She was now sure to die. Elsa suddenly got an idea, and found a sharp rock and carved the words. 'I love you mom and dad, and I didn't mean what I said. I hope you understand,' on the trunk of a tree. Elsa hoped that, by some miracle, her parents, or someone would find her body, and see the message she left on the tree. 555
Crack! Elsa looked up suddenly. "Hello?" she said as loud as she could; but still, her voice came out as no more than a whisper. "Is someone there?" Elsa's blue eyes gleamed with hope as she heard another twig snap. 66
Meow. The kitten walked out from behind the bushes. It was an adorable white and gray kitten with a soft-looking coat and blue-gray eyes that looked very frightened.77
"Are you all alone too?" Elsa whispered to the kitten, as it came near her. "It's okay, I won't hurt you. I bet you're in need of a friend right now just as much as I am."88
The kitten meowed in response.99
"I'm going to name you Destiny." Elsa's voice broke and she grew slightly light-headed from the loss of blood. "Did you run away too?"1010
Destiny blinked twice.1111
"I bet you miss your family. So do I," Elsa said, and the tears she'd been trying so hard to hold back fell freely down her cheeks.1212
Destiny closed the small distance between Elsa and herself, and nudged Elsa's arm lightly with her head.1313
"Oh," Elsa blinked in surprise. "You’re probably cold." Elsa held the kitten lovingly and securely, and shared her shawl with her. 1414
Elsa's vision began to sway, and she knew her time was coming to an end.1515
“Goodbye,” Elsa whispered, as she started to grow faint, and took her last breath. 61616
And there, she fell silent, never to move again.17
Author notes
Just so you know, this is not a new write. My computer does not allow me to submit prewrites for reasons unknown to me. I'm not sure if this matters, but I just want you to know.
For a contest: The prompt I picked is Picture # 10. 
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Okay so you what I'm going to do...Im going to take all those great comments down below and role them up into one.
I liked this, it was cute and sad. It's something I'd definitely be interested in reading more of - I didn't expect the ending, that was for sure. I was certain she'd find her way out. Well done on surprising me
Thanks for your entry, good luck!
Reading this is a lovely short story I enjoyed reading this, i felt sad for her and they way you wrote made you want to feel this way. Exactly what i was looking for in this contest! best of luck and keep writing, really good. i didn't expect that ending at all. Well done.
Okay so here you go. Those comments down below and my thoughts on this were exactly the same so I roled them into one and made it into just a big comment. Great job, keep up the good work and thanks for entering my contest.
-Jennifer
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beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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DQ.
The contest is 500 words or less (it's in the title and the contest description like 2 times).
Good luck with your story
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I liked this, it was cute and sad. It's something I'd definitely be interested in reading more of - I didn't expect the ending, that was for sure. I was certain she'd find her way out. Well done on surprising me

Thanks for your entry, good luck!
~ Lí-Lí
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Reading this is a lovely short story
I enjoyed reading this, i felt sad for her and they way you wrote made you want to feel this way. Exactly what i was looking for in this contest! best of luck and keep writing, really good. i didn't expect that ending at all. Well done
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Thanks! I normally don't do this genre...I'm more into the fantasy thing. I'm glad you liked it!
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