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Zoe had come to the end.1

Now looking out her car window she wondered when this road would bring her. She drove with tears, fleeing her past, trying to steer herself to her new day. The life in her kicked for a new home and she wondered if night would fall all too fast. She had not seen a road sign for a motel for miles now and she needed to rest and eat as her eyes searched the darkening future.2

Suddenly up ahead Zoe sees a blinking sign that says open 24/7 in neon lighting. She drives in to the parking lot and gets out and goes to the front desk, ringing the bell. This hot guy comes to the desk wiping his eyes. He says, "hi, may i help u."3

Zoe says, " yes. i would like to have a room for the night, please."4

He groggily wipes his eyes again an yawns an tells her to follow him. Zoe does. He opens the door for her. Zoe enters the room. He tells her that if she needs anything to just call him and he motions to the phone. "My name is Max," he says as he departs.5

The room was a rest, but it was not a solution. The emptiness of it only made Zoe feel the of doom of her situation more and more. She looked at the house phone and thought of the man who had just left her. She flashed to the bedroom and two bodies fucking and wanted the room to be filled with her screams of joy.6

Zoe had come to the end of her frustrations. She told herself that her days and nights of denial were behind her. She hadn't come this far just to get all shy and morose. No, she told herself. Not tonight of all nights!7

Zoe thought to herself what can i do to take my frustration out on hmm she thought ah ha my dildo she opens up her carry on an digs in her bag looking for it, here it is her favorite dildo it has four vibes built into it that's why she loves it so much. She lays on the bed an turns it on her toy...mm so good she thinks of max he's a cutie ahhh almost there yes yes ohhh all of a sudden she lets out this ear spiting scream yes she thinks now shes sated but for how long.8

Max jolts out of bed he thought he heard a scream not sure it was human or animal his father the owner of the hotel's awake as well max he says that sounded like it came from that young girl that came today. Go check it will you please yeah dad i guess so...on his way there he thinks she's kinda hot with her black and blond hair while he's thinking of her he's not paying attention an one of the people yell at him for bumping into them oh sorry sir you better watch it young man, max forgot for a moment where he was then he remembered the scream so he looked at the door he's in front of an what ya know it's hers for a moment he debates on knocking then he hears his name an thinks that she's calling him for something so he grabs the door knob it doesn't open so he tries again this time it opens an max has to blink his eye's because he must be seriously losing it or he's seeing a girl master bait an moaning his name max's mouth drops open. Zoe heard the door open but shes to far gone to care rite now all she   thinks of is getting off an fucking max hot emo boy, i wonder if hes taken she pouts for a moment oh well more the fun if he is she can feel her orgasm approaching she gets a tightening feeling in her pussy an a tingling feeling in her abdomen her toes curl an Bam her orgasm hits her at top speed an all she can think to do is scram she opened her mouth but nothing comes out because max's hands over it he tells her to be quit he doesn't want her wake anyone up, she slowly opens her eye's to bare chested max an wow she thought he was hot before he's hotter when he has no shirt on an whats that he has a tattoo nice suddenly she remembers she only has on a tank an No panties. She gets off the bed an goes to her bag an pulls on some boy boxers an puts them on...so can i help you it takes him a Minuit to realize she's talking to him he stutters i heard a s-scram oh sorry i didn't mean to wake anyone she looks away then goes back to bed you can leave now sorry i woke you max good night, ah max can think about is her beautiful shaven pussy an god that vibrator in her an those boobs it was enough to give him an in-stint erection damn it how am i gonna hide this from dad he thought it over I'll just lie to him an tell him i got it from looking at porn. The desk clerk knock on her door...Miss? 9

yea I'll be rite there Zoe said she walk's out of the bathroom in just a towel on an opens the door, oh it's hot emo boy she thinks yea may i help u, in the room Max is asked to strip and show his cock by Zoe...take off that towel and bend over that chair....he licks his palm and roughly swipes Zoe's slit before he thrust his full member past her pussy lips and drives deep into her core...Zoe moans as Max drives into her...her eyes widen as she feels the enormous cock stuffs her pussy...she rocks on this cock...this man fuck...her cum deliver there is so much more coming....can you take it all....and then he hits her cervix...

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  • PinkKittens
    October 18

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    This was difficult to read for a wide variety of reasons, but it still somehow managed to be sexy. It's interesting how the writing is comprehensible in the beginning, but as soon as she is alone and masturbating, the writing becomes increasingly muddled and messy, much like the thought processes of a person approaching orgasm.

  • roses4life
    September 20
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    it was good but confusing at times like the format of the writing


  • onaya3
    September 12

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    It reminds me of a song...

    ...back in the 90's, I can't remember the exact name but the chorus went along the lines of; "all I want to do is make love to you." Which funnily enough was about a married woman's one night stand with an employee at the hotel she's forced to stay at on a dark, stormy night.

    Your sex scenes are very bare which works. But it can throw the reader off by changing tone in the piece. Compare the end of the story to the beginning which has constructed sentences and paragraphs, then in paragraph 9 there's hardly a full stop used I know it sounds boring, but proper punctuation etc does help the audience to follow along. However this piece is certainly worth the effort by doing a little polishing. I'd be happy to read more when you embellish!


  • oOSnoballsOo
    September 9
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    WOW!

    Super hot!