Just breathe.
Your mind will hold you up.
And believe,
That your tinted heart is good enough.1
So drag your hand up to my heart,
This moment won't last forever, no.
Because I'm slowly beginning to...
Fade away in your memories.2
Just breathe.
Your tinted soul and cigarettes will hold you up for good.
And believe,
That this breathing creature is you. 3
And when this breathing creature breaks,
I'll be there to put a band-aid over your heart.
Because when your memories of me begin to fade away,
I'll be there, your faded angel.4
Just breathe.
Your faded angel is here now.
And believe,
That your tinted heart is good enough.
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Erm...I don't know what to call this..>< Help!
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loved it
but for me something rebeliously clicked against it, i dont know why.. because no matter how tainted or stained a soul is, it can feel that someone cares
(well.. thats what I believe..)
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Really nice poem you have written..
The plot, I mean the way this poem goes was a definite smooth sail..
great Job!
I like this part best.
"So drag your hand up to my heart,
This moment won't last forever, no.
Because I'm slowly beginning to...
Fade away in your memories."
Great Job! Keep postin'
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Whoa this is really good. That's cool how you put your username in it. You are really good this was really well written. Good Job.
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wow!
I L-O-V-E this! I also love how your username is in it (love the username btw) and this is just so intriguing and well-written! I love it!!! You're 11? WOW, nice job!beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thanks. x]
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Good stuff! The words weren't too complexed so it was a smooth read and easily understood. I enjoyed the way you structured teh words and sentences together to form it. fantastic
p.s. i like the name Just Breathe like it is already called. very good very straight to the point. -
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Thank you. x3
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