Crying these tears,
Knowing what's to come,
You'll never be near.1
Is it God's fates for me?
To be saved and then left again,
Is my happiness never meant to be?2
Can't catch my breath,
When our worlds collide,
What will be left?3
The Hero's will die,
While our darkest fears rise high,
And our bravery lies.4
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wow that is sad
this poem is very touching,but i like it.it's good.it has a great ending.and i like how it rhymes.i like the part when it says the hero will die,while our darkest ffears rise high,and our bravery lies.very well done
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 1.
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good
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This was very well done. I like how it was all almost questions that were answered, yet, at the same time, not answered. interesting pattern as well, with using three lines and rhyming the first and third. great job
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Good ending. It was captivating, enthralling, deep, and thought provoking. I had to think about it for a minute, but...I can honestly say that I think it is good.
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i think your poem started off weak. but but the last two stanzas i started to really enjoy the poem.the third stanza is by far my favorite out of this poem.
im not sure if by Hero's you meant heros or not. a little confused on that. but overall a nice read.
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I really love this poem. When i read a poem, I never have a clue what the words are saying, I just feel it, you know? well, your poems radiate really meaningful things! Keep writing!
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Excellent poem. It was full of deep and raw emotion and it flowed well. Keep writing.
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VERY good
you r such a good poet
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great
i liked this poem, very emotional and it is from the heart. but one thing i must say, everyone does find love, as from your profile, you are very young. you will find love one day. i promis you that. everyone does sooner or later
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Very emotional. I was struck with each line and absolutely loved the picture you chose. It's kinda like a sad melody or something like that...
It's so short and yet you created alot of emotion and actually environment as well.
Excellant write!
Rian
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wow your very good at adding the right picture to your poems. you are way better at poems that i am lol thats good...making poetry helps you write stories become more real and very descriptive.
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intense
very intense poem but well written. It was a pleasure for me to read. I noticed one mistake: "Is it god fates for me?" is it supposed to be "good fates" or something else? Just a little confused, but nice work.
PS: it would mean a lot if you could check out my novel "A Broken Reflection"
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Actually, it's suppose to be God's* fate. thanks though
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