Serpentine

Serpentine

I see you standing before me. The darkness shadowed like draping curtains behind the stage in front of me. Small star like sparkling lights flicker and glitter against the deep emerald corset you are wearing that hugs your body tightly. Accentuating every beautiful curve of your voluptuous body. 1

The Black satin ribbons that bound you crossed, complimenting your deliciously sinful full breasts sway me from side to side as I am magnetized and mesmerized to move forward. To come closer towards your beckoning desire. Like a demon you posses me, toy with my vulnerability in the most excruciating ways. Filling my mind with temptation, with horror, power, obsession and unmerciful lust. 2

Without you I am nothing. With you I am everything I was made to be. I am everything I am. I am the truth inside your penetrating eyes, and the agonizingly honey dripping between your clamped teasing thighs. 3

I want to bleed to feed you, not like a vampire, no not at all. But like a whimpering blood whore wanting her mistress, her master, her dominator, her savior to taste the richness bled from her loins, surging passion through every blackened artery. A marking of my commitment, my friendship, my everlasting love for you my sweet crimson plum.4

Now as I stand face to face with you. Your body swaying with mine in the darkness. The two of us searching underneath the scarce light. Exploring each other in the most intimate, hauntingly sensual ways. I want nothing more that to find your heart, my hands pressed against your feiry flesh to  your violently beating pulse and whisper sinister delights in your ear. So that I may see your eyes light up, wide like luminous globes. Awaiting what I do next.

Author notes

It just came to me. I hope I spelled it right ;]
This is pretty much what I was thinking about writing for some time and while it probably lacks a lot in your eyes [as a reader] it comes from the heart and was a struggle to write, but a freeing expression of my feelings towards my best friend.

Hope it crawls beneath your skin Krista and finds home in your heart.

Probably not completly well edited, but if you feel the need to correct me I will not take offense ;]

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  seasonsoflove
  September 10
  
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  This is really good!!
  
  Plot: 4
  Language: 4
  Theme: 3
  
  Total: 11
  
  Great work. Keep it up.
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  Whispers
  September 6
  
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  Oh my beautiful, luscious, wickedly gifted little moonbeam...you have left me gagged and bound at your mercy, my emotions a whirlpool of feverant passion that has me hung up by meat hooks until the blood pours from every aching orfice.
  
  You're such an enchanting, unique writer, one that posesses an insatiable gift for vivid imagery, poetic flair and words that caress my bones until I'm hypnotized and left in a sweet, intoxicating daze. It's the purest surrender...better than sex, more sacred that anything that exists on earth.
  
  Shrouded in an eternity of cold, unforgiving darkness, you are the star that is born from a halo of dust; that feeble, wavering light which suddenly flares without warning until it engulfs everything around it.
  
  I want to stick this in my pocket and carry it around with me forever. I've never obsessed over anyone who has shared such a deep, almost chillingly intense connection in my life.
  
  Don't you dare change a thing about this piece. It was meant to be frenzied, every word spilled from your elegant fingers like the most luxurious wine, like the desire that grows between my legs as I imagine you writing this for me...only me.
  
  I'm spellbound.
  
  ~ love, Serpentine
  

  
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  nobbyskypekiller
  September 6
  
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  Emotionally intense, highly descriptive, atmospheric and really erotic. Try using a lot of short sentences (one-three words each) in this type of stories, it works quite well and would fit your style. No spelling/grammatical errors that i'd notice. Also, i recall there was a lesbian character in Neil Gaiman's Neverwhere also called Serpentine, any connection?

  
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  Lady Pixie
  September 6
  
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  I really liked this. It was poetic and full of powerful raw emotion. The picture really compliments the piece also. The imagery and visuals in your use of descriptions were well done. I'm here only to enjoy a read for a change, and will not be critical for this. These are your thoughts, inner desires, and so I feel it's perfect in its right to be informal for this kind of read. The only thing I might correct you on is in P2- the b in black shouldn't be capitalized
  
  Overall, you've shared a beautiful short here. I really did enjoy reading this
  
  Keep writing!
  
  Pixie
  
  

  
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  DreamWanderer
  September 5
  
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  Poetic stream of consciousness, a favorite technique of mine. Well written but a little abstruse, but highly personal stuff often is. It held my attention. Incidentally, more writers on this site need to delve into stuff like this more often...