Prologue: 1
‘DO IT!’ Andrew’s voice screamed in my head, pushing my feet forward with such intensity it scared me. 2
Rae lay against the floor, her arm broken and twisted in a horrible way. Blood came from her mouth and nose, dropping onto the floor with a gentle thud. The Dark swarmed around her, sucking her element straight from her soul. I tore my eyes away from her and down the long, dimly lit hallway to where Hunter stood.3
He stared at me, his eyes wide in terror. I felt tears begin to run down my cheeks, the gun held tightly in my hands aimed straight at his head. I shook my head back and forth. Andrew sneered inside my head, pushing me forward to take another step towards Hunter. He forced my finger onto the trigger, but I pushed against his thoughts. I wouldn’t hurt Hunter, I’d brought him and Rae here and now they were going to die. 4
And so was I. 5
Author notes
It's short, but hopefully it got you interested, right? 
Let me know if I should continue. Thanks for reading!
-Vio
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I'm soooo interested in this story. It really sounds amazing!!!!
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holy freaking crap that was awesome. this is the first time in a long time idk who these characters are! this got me interested and i would LOVE to see you continue, really. i can see a lot coming from this. and im sure ill keep reading this! i hope you post the first chapter tonight
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Aww, thanks Alex. I'm not clueing you in on any of it, if I chose to continue, of course. Because you always know too much, and that's not happening with this. I might post the chapter tonight, though I don't want to. It'll take a lot of begging on your part to get it out of me.
Thanks for reading, buddy. 
-Vio
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Very interesting! It's a bit hard to follow because you've used so many different names, so maybe if you introduced the characters one by one and dragged it out for a couple hundred more words it would be easier to understand, but prologue are supposed to get you thinking, right? I can't wait to read more of this!!
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Thanks for pointing that out. That was one of the problems I thought about, actually. I'm actually going to try and explain that more in the first chapter, so, hopfully that will explain things a bit more, right? Thanks a bunch for reading, hals!
-Vio -
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Yeah, I can't wait to read the next chapter! It's good to have a mysterious prologue that's totally unexplained, anyway - it keeps people reading!
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It definitely got me interested. And I think you should also definitely continue! Pulled me right in and leaves me wanting lots more. Great job and I hope you continue, seems like it could be a vair vair interesting idea that could work out spectacularly! :]
Lexx
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Oh thank goodness! XD I was worried it was a bit too short or whatever. I'm glad someone tookt he time to read it. Thanks for reading! I really appreciate it.
-Vio
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