The SWAT truck’s sirens were screaming and lights were flashing in the dead of night. Speeding down the streets hurrying to reach its destination. Six S.W.A.T officers are in the back and four of them remain quiet waiting and prepared for anything…except two. 1
“Hey Mathew, you alright? Getting a little car sick bro?” John asked. 2
Mathew looked up at him and stared at John with his light brown eyes, “yeah….just my wife forcing me to go to church this Sunday,” he said burying his face in his hands pretending to cry.3
“Oh come on,” his brother john hit his helmet, “going to church is not all bad. All you have to do is let Jesus Christ into your life and pray. You risk your life every day and you can’t even repent? Come on…what is holding you back?”4
Mathew shrugged, “I don’t know…I hear so many things about the Christian religion. I hear that it is very hypocritical and I guess I am just waiting for a sign that he is really there.”5
“I wouldn't wait for signs these days from the Lord if I were you.”6
“Why is that?” 7
“Take a look around,” he said pointing at all the S.W.A.T members, “we are being used every single day and have no breaks. Crimes rates have shot up thirty percent in the last month and now it is up to forty-five. That SWAT uniform isn’t going to protect you like God does. You my brother have to repent before it is too late; He will show you the way.”8
Mathew sighed, “Eh…I’ll think about it.”9
His brother shook his head, “here…I wrote down a verse from the bible to show you but never had the chance to, this is a proof that God will come again.” John handed him a small folded piece of paper.10
Mathew stared at the paper and thought, what if there is a God? Would he really be saved? Thoughts of doubt filled his mind so he didn’t think this little piece of paper from the bible would mean anything so he unfolded it but the truck stopped so suddenly the SWAT members almost flew into the walls. 11
The back door was opened by a veteran officer yelling, “hurry up boys! We don’t have all day!”12
Mathew quickly shoved the paper into his pocket and quickly jumped off from the back. As they jumped off Mathew looked around seeing many cops surrounding an old, deserted, forgotten high school building and the police cars lighted up the night sky of red and blue. Guns were drawn out and cops were yelling at people to get back. 13
The old officer looked at them, “Alright! What we got here isn’t any hold up, so you really need to focus on finding your target! We have no description of this man but we chased him here and have the place surrounded so he can’t escape.”14
“Only one?” Mathew blurted out. 15
“What? You want more in there?!” the officer walked closer to Mathew, “this isn’t no ordinary gangster! This man committed twelve murders by eating three of them alive, chopped up a married couple and their kid and killed the other six with nothing but his bare hands!”16
John shuddered at the thought and felt very squeamish, “sir…so we arrest him?”17
The veteran officer glared at john, “No! We are ordered to kill this sick bastard! Now I want you six to search each floor and once you have eyes on him shoot! Got that?!”18
“We got it!” all six SWAT members shouted at the same time and immediately forced their way through the crowd of angry people and entered the school building. John and Mathew were always paired up together because they were brothers, so when a tight situation came they always knew exactly what to do. 19
John and Mathew quickly ran up to the third floor while the others took the second and first. They had their weapons out pointing down the dark hallway. This place was a mess, desks were in the hallway flipped over, graffiti covered the walls and paint slowly peeling off, trash of every sort was scattered everywhere. 20
A chill ran down john’s spine, “you see anything?”21
Mathew shined his flashlight into an empty classroom, “nah…coming up empty. Not only is the dark annoying but I HATE ghosts and I feel like one is watching me right now.”22
“Really?” John chuckled, “with God on your side fear is something small,” he said entering another classroom across from where his brother is. 23
Mathew rolled his eyes, “whatever.” And continued down the hallway little by little being very cautious. Being the little brother john had always suggested things that would “better” his life. Now that he has gone into Christianity it seems like his childhood came back. Annoying as it may be it does show some truth in what he says…maybe he is just being too stubborn. 24
Suddenly a loud crash followed by john yelling came from the classroom he went in. Mathew quickly turned around and ran to the room jumping over obstacles wasn’t making it any easier.25
He pointed the gun and flashlight in the room and saw no one, “john?” he whispered, “Where are you bro?” 26
Mathew walked around the classroom and his brother shot up from the ground and scared Mathew, “crap! John what the hell were you doing on the floor?!”27
John tried to settle himself because he looked shocked, “uh yeah…I am alright. I just tripped and it scared me. So much mess in here and lack of light…I hate this place.”28
“Oh come on Christian man, thought with God on your side you wouldn't be scared?” Mathew said laughing. 29
“Hey! I said it is a small thing not that I am immune to it,” he said hitting his brother’s helmet, “now lets hurry and find this guy.”30
Mathew still chuckling followed john into the hallway. It seems like as they went in deeper the darker it got. They searched almost every classroom except the last one which was blocked by many desks. 31
The thought of moving the desks out of the way crossed Mathew’s mind but before he acted there was a loud bang in the blocked room.32
“You think he….or it is in there?” john said pointing his assault rifle at the door. 33
Mathew shrugged, “only one way to find out right?” he said already shoving the dusty desks out of the way.34
Mathew pushed the desks out of their way making a lot of noise as it screeched across the tile floors. 35
“There we go; you ready?” he asked john pointing his gun at the door. 36
His brother nodded and gave him the signal to go; Mathew threw opened the door and they both ran in guns aimed at a man that stood in the dark but his face was hidden. 37
“Let me see your hands!” John demanded.38
“GI,” the man whispered and lifted up his hands.39
Mathew stayed aim at his torso, “get on the floor now!”40
“GP is going to leave…while GI stays here….with me.” The man spoke. 41
Mathew shouted again, “I said get on the floor!”42
The man started to laugh hysterically, “It is time! Goodbye GP!” the man turned around and ran at the brothers with a knife in his hand.43
“I warned you idiot!” Mathew shouted and fired at him. 44
The bullets were precise and hit its target and the man fell to the floor. Mathew and John slowly walked over to the dead man. The man’s blood slowly crept out from underneath him. 45
A radio voice then came out of john’s radio at his side, “I heard shots fired, are you guys ok?”46
“Yeah we got him. He came at us and we fired.” 47
“Alright now get back out here! Looks very dangerous out here and…”a loud static ran through and cut the radio off. 48
“What the hell was that about? What is dangerous?” he said walking over to john and turning his back on the dead body. 49
John messed with the radio, “not sure…but let’s hurry.”50
“Alright but first,” Mathew turned around, “we have to get rid of…whoa…whoa! Where did he go?!”51
The body and the puddle of blood was gone; Mathew looked around pointing his gun everywhere. John looked around wondering where he or it went. 52
It was all quiet but the brothers breathing was all that can be heard. Suddenly there was a loud crack of thunder that scared Mathew a bit but then the thunder hit again and again soon it turned into sounding like thousands of bolts erupted in the sky. A bright light flashed in the sky and lighted up the room where Mathew and john was at. 53
Mathew covered his eyes from the harsh bright light but as soon as it came it was over in less than twenty seconds. Mathew uncovered his eyes, “what was that john?” there was no reply.54
“John?” Mathew looked around, “John?! Where are you?!”55
He was gone but where did he go? Before Mathew could look for his brother inside the building he heard screaming and loud crying outside.56
“Crap!” he said to himself as he ran down stairs and out of the building.57
He looked around and it looked like half the police officers and the people surrounding the area disappeared. 58
People were crying out loud, “why?! Why didn’t he take me?!” Others were in the middle of the street praying and crying at the same time. It seemed like everyone was sad…did someone die? Thunder grumbled in the sky and slowly faded away. 59
“I got it! I got it on camera!” someone shouted.60
Mathew ran over to the gathering crowd of people and watched as he played it. The sky was filled with thousands of thunderbolts and was loud as they all started to hit each other. Soon they all collided and a bright white light blinded everyone and the camera. 61
“The rapture came true!” someone shouted.62
“Why did God take us away!?” others shouted in anger. 63
Mathew slowly walked away from the crowd and stared into the dark sky, “where are you john?”64
A voice repeated itself in Mathew’s head, “here…I wrote down a verse from the bible to show you but never had the chance to, this is a proof that God will come again.” 65
Mathew reached into his pocket and pulled out the wrinkled paper. He un folded it and read it out loud, “For as the lightning comes from the east and flashes to the west, so will the coming of the son of man be…Mathew 24:27,”66
He dropped the paper and fell to his knees, “I am sorry john…God…I am sorry that I did not listen,” tears began to fill his eyes and he cried as others did so in the middle of the street. 67
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beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
