Happy Fathers Day Daddy. (poem)

Okay, so it is amost fathers' day here and I wanted to try out my poet-ical skills So I wrote my daddy a poem. Please tell me if it is good1


A little girl needs a daddy,
For so many things,
Like holding her up high,
Where the sunshine sings.


Like being the slow sounds,
That tells her all is right,
When she wakes from a nightmare,
When she is in such fright.2


Like being the love in life,
That rises through time,
When all else falls apart,
He always offers his heart.
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Like giving her the love,
That is her life and air,
So loving and so kind,
She will always have him there.


Happy fathers day dad4

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Author notes

So make the most of what you have
and never let anyone
control your
life or love.

Clary.
Happy Fathers Day to all

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  • NarniaKid
    September 4
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    Aww... That is so sweeet! I'm sure your dad loves it!
    Brilliant Job and Keep Writing!

    -Crystal


  • Just Falling Apart
    September 4
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    awwwwwwwwwww that is soooo sweeeeeeeeeetttttttttt!!!!!!


  • lavanya
    September 4

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    Beautiful poem Clary...very emotional ....i must say you writes poem very naturally and this poem of urs touched my heart. keep writing dear and Happy fathers day to u too


  • dancer.
    September 4

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    Clary:

    Well-written and beautiful! It's exactly the poem that a father would truly enjoy. I reccomend giving it to him. The picture almost made me tear up after reading the piece.

    The depth and emotion that run through this piece is truly original...no one could can ever copy another persons piece because each person puts their own amount of purity into it.

    Amazingly done, and I hope to see it racking up trophies soon!

    Best Wishes,
    dancer.


  • x.SilverHeart.x
    September 3
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    That was beautiful! I'm sure your dad will LOVE it!!


  • Farhan gold member
    September 3
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    Hi Clary!

    This is a very well written. I liked it. I will also show it to my father on father's day. Good.

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