When I'll Trust You

Twisting, swirling,
kissing, whirling,
up and down the walls,
singing through it all.
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"When the night comes,
and everything's all right,
seeing definite fairy tale endings,
on their way into sight.
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"That's when I'll trust you,
with everything I have.
That's when I'll trust you,
to keep my heart in hand.
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"When that night comes,
that I give myself to you,
then everything will be perfect,
no matter what I do."
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Twisting, swirling,
kissing, whirling,
up and down the walls,
you holding me through it all.
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I listen to your voice chime,
to a lovely lullaby,
---
"Love and hope and dreams,
everythings all right,
don't you worry about the time to come,
because thats not tonight.
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"I'll hold you dear,
through it all,
you'll never slip,
you'll never fall.
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"In my arms,
you will lie,
together forever,
we'll never die."
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I love his hair,
his lips,
his skin,
and everything within.
---
He keeps me safe,
and squeezes me with ease,
in a lovely silence
we breathe.
---
Twisting, swirling,
kissing, whirling,
up and down the walls,
together through it all.1

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  • Farhan gold member
    November 6

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    Hello there!

    Nice job. Very good indeed. The flow was nice and the poem was full of sweet emotions.
    Thanks for giving me such a nice read and good luck in the contest.
    Happy writing.
    Farhan.


  • lavanya
    September 7

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    Sweet poem , full of warm emotions and future dreams....wording s are smooth and flow is sift. good work ...keep writing and good luck for contest.