Hear You; Hear Me (poem)

Hear your words? 1

They cut me like a knife 2

Bleeding out at your feet 3

Vanishing life4

Hear your words? 5

Face down in a crimson pool 6

Ripped apart at the seams7

I was your fool8

Hear your words? 9

Echoes of the past 10

Forgive me for dreaming 11

Future to last12

Hear your words? 13

Secrets and lies 14

Trapped by the truth15

She denies 16

Hear your words? 17

Dreaming of someday 18

but all I hear19

Too far away20

Hear your words? 21

Hopes dreams and fears22

how do you not know them all 23

After the years24

Hear your words? 25

So shallow and meek 26

Pointless and cruel 27

Leave me weak28

Hear your words? 29

To build or destroy 30

You were my world 31

I’m just a toy32

Hear your words? 33

You held the key 34

You were my savior 35

Still not free36

Hear your words? 37

Say what you mean 38

Is this your plan 39

Pain so keen 40

Hear your words? 41

Lost and found42

In your arms 43

Now bound44

Hear your words? 45

Thin and cold 46

Tired of this game 47

Way too old48

Hear my words 49

This is the end 50

Be my enemy?51

Or stay my friend?52

Author notes

Ok...umm... well...I wrote it the other day and this contest I figuted would be a great way to get feed back...not a fan of poetry on storywrite..but I'll survive... be harsh... I haven't written in a while so...I need it...

Blessed Be
Phoenix

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  • mememe6
    September 9

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    I might help to break this up into stanzas and have a rhyme theme. It would just make it easier to read and understand.

    Other that that it was really good! You used your plot well, and I enjoyed it.

    I hope you do well in my contest!