The World As I See It1
On some days I day dream and fantasize2
The perfect world which I'd like to realize3
A world where happiness spins from the clouds4
Like soft whispers that lift away the shrouds5
I leave this world of cruelty behind6
as fantasies play endless in my mind7
There's no husband having a love affair8
People don't take jabs and they really care9
My daughter has all the love in the World10
A space for her freedom has been unfurled11
People won't pick and tear her apart12
and then deny the trouble that they start13
My world is a vast meadow in the Spring14
how I love the scent that lavender brings15
An air of freshness envelopes the land16
Our souls fly free as the heavens expand17
The hands of God reach down to touch us all18
wiping away ailments that to us befall19
People love and understand each other20
The acts of kindness begin to smother21
Along the way there's a cobble stone path22
Running along side a waterfall bath23
Its spray makes you feel as though you're alive24
and into crystal clear waters you dive25
Cool and refreshing gentle waves you ride26
You have no reason anymore to hide27
All that betrothed you is now simply gone28
Everyday you live the sun's early dawn29
My finally plea is heard to set me free30
My soul feels its spirituality31
No one degrades, mocks or is abusive32
People find smiles that were once elusive33
Laughter rings over the cloudless sky34
Like harmony in sync, no use to cry35
This world is perfect I hope you can see36
All the anguish has vanished completely37
Reality is not the world as it seems38
Instead it is something held in my dreams39
as I slumber in the crook of the moon40
I hope to greet everyone very soon41
As there is a star that bears your own name42
Once you visit here you'll not be the same 43
Ride the magic carpet of the lush green grass44
That is the way we all travel in class45
Tiny fairies dance on flower bud tops46
spreading all their cheer that will never stop47
The gateway to this place is a rainbow48
So once you find one please don't move too slow49
Hop on and you're own pot of gold you'll find50
While you are letting go and free your mind51
Peace holds the future that each of us seek52
You'll find it along the freshwater creek!53
Author notes
I know this a bit more metaphorical. I hope that's OK
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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A very inspiring piece, beautifully written
I agree with ecrivain....some of the lines in this would be great on a greeting card.
Very lovely, nice flow and carries a wonderful message.
Dee
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not bad
I think you could pick some stanzas from this and send to a contest for greeting card verses. It's a pleasant, peaceful write in any case. -
I liked this alot. Well done, it flowed nicely and was easy to read. Well done and good luck!
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This is a wonderful poem. It has a nice flow. I did see two errors.....In your 8th stanza it should read 'final' instead of finally, and the last stanza's first line should be your - I make that mistake all the time without catching it.
It's a cool background.....but I find it very distracting.
As mentioned earlier, the piece itself is written well. Good job & good luck in the contest!
~ ~ Sincerely, Janet ~ ~
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