Snoozing in still meadows; with foxes silent as deer. Love and hope and dreams, nightmares must be feared. The little doves soaring high; fluttering their wings to a quiet lullaby. Rest your head on a pillow of grass and let the world hold you in its lovely grasp. Nature sings a steady song, while heaven chimes along.1
Listen to that rhythm pound, in the nightly fog.2
Every little creature, big and small, lifts its head to their Father’s exquisite song. Listen to the harp play, strumming the darkness away. Light shines in the sky, that’s the end of our lullaby.3
A contest entry
- In 100 Words! by CallMeWhenUrRich.
270 points, ended September 5, 27 entries
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Comments
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That's gorgeous. I love that it's about God's creations, they're so beautiful and I hate that people are being irresponsible and destroying them.
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wow. That was beautiful. Very descriptive, and very well written, easy to understand. I really like the last sentence, how you summed it up like that. GReat job!!!!
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Good work. Poetic rhythm adds a lot.
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Language: 4
Theme: 4
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A nice lyrical feel, with some great imagery.
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Awww this was beautiful! I love the way you wrote it! Thank you so much for entering, good luck!
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Has a poetic rhythm, yet is in the form of prose. I love it.
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Language: 3
Theme: 4
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Beautiful imagery
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Oh my gosh, I loved this!!!
The imagery was wonderfully done and I loved the rhythm of it. Amazing job, a definite finalist!!! Thanks so much for your entry in 100 Words and good luck!!!!
P.S. Might wanna change the colour though, it came a little hard on the eyes.
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This is so breathtakingly beautiful!!!!!! The description so vibrant and it breathes life into the iea. I love this, it makes me smile.
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pounding their wings -> seems at odds with quiet lullaby..perhaps fluttering their wings?
I like it.
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