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"No, Aaron! What are you doing?"1

"This is what you get for cheating on me, you slut, now shut up."2

I thought it was going to be a simple date, a trip to the movies, and then a good make-out session in the back of his car, maybe even more. Apparently, Aaron had other plans.3

He shoved me against the icy wall. My cheek smashed against the stone. 4

"I never cheated on you! What are you talking about?"5

"Don't try to trick me, Mea, I saw you with him."6

Oh, dear god. He caught on. But I never knew he would get so violent when he found out. What if he rapes me? Kills me? Protect me, lord!7

"You are gonna pay, Mea, oh, you are gonna pay."8

"A-Aaron, wha-what are you gonna d-do to m-me?"9

"I won't kill you, no.. But I will make you wish you were dead.. you will be begging me for death."10

That was a night of unspeakable horror.11

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"That's all I remember, officer. really." 13

I woke up, a week later (Or so they say) in the IC unit of Mannhatan Equinox Hospital. I had all these tubes and wires on me.14

A machine showed my heart rate. A spike, higher spike, dip, repeat. The bright green line burned into my brain. When I closed my eyes, I could still see it, like when you look at a flashlight too long, and you see the little blob everywhere. Every once in a while, a nurse would come to take my blood pressure or temperature.15

Pretty soon, a nurse came to replace the nearly empty IV bag with a fresh one. She was pretty, with curly brown hair sitting loose on her shoulders. Her shining steel eyes showed love for her career. I figured that she would be a good person to ask. I glanced at her ID.16

"Nurse Olivia, what happened to me?"17

She sighed, sat down on the edge of the bed.18

"Brace yourself, kiddo."19

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"AARON! STOP! SOMEBODY HE-"21

Aaron's meaty hand flew across my face, his class ring leaving a gash right below my cheekbone.22

"Shut up, whore."23

"HELP! SOMEBO-"24

Again, he slapped me.25

"That's enough! I'm sick of you, Mea!"26

Aaron dragged me into the trunk of his Toyota. Hog-tied me, gagged me. Gave me a good punch in the rib, to remind me who's boss. Soon, I heard the driver's door slam shut, and he drove somewhere, where he would do things to me that would make a hitman scream for his mama.27

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My eyes teared up as the memories began flowing back. The nurse simply told me that he had injured my face, then drove off with me, but that was all that was nessesary to conjure up the past in my mind.29

Nurse Olivia saw that I wasn't taking it too well, and took me up in her arms. "Baby, it's okay, it's over now, your safe, everything is alright."30

But that couldn't stop the memories, still flowing.31

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The ride was hours long. It could have been only a few minutes, but it didn't matter. I was thinking of a way to escape. Perhaps I could pop open the trunk with my foot, and roll out?33

Just when I decided to do just that, the trunk popped open to reveal Aaron, anger clouding his dark amber eyes. He heaved me out of the trunk, onto the asphalt, bruising my already damaged body.34

He carried me into a warehouse, all gray and concrete and empty. Slashed the ropes. Ripped the duct tape off my mouth.35

"Ready for this, Mea?"36

He shoved me aginst a large wooden circle. He obviously had this planned. It had chains in just the right places for wrists and ankles.37

"Take your clothes off."38

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Crituqe would be nice, please.
Then again, compliments are better.
Gimme a nice blend of the teo.

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  • jkingmaker
    August 30

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    I think this is a good piece and could the the basis for far more. I like the characters..but would like to see more emotion and feeling. That would round this out nicely.

    Great stuff.