Summer's Demise

Along with Autumn, came sadness, and Summer's long awaited demise. And now, tears fall steadily, wishing for the cold to silently disappear, and take the thrashing winds along with it. And as I lay on the dirty cement, I am reminded of something, needing a Lament.1

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  • shefalls
    October 2, 2005
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    good

    weird. Your second sentance is actually a fragment. It's definetely short and only gives a hint of a thought, but I like what you have. You should expand, this could get to be very interesting. Maybe expand on whats leaving with summer. I like how you say your awaiting summers demise but sadness comes with fall. that's really poetic if you meant to express that the whole year just majorly sucks. which i assume you did. it's good. keep up the good work.

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