Sarah and Josh were sitting next to each other in the economy class in flight number IC 814.A pretty air hostess passed them.1
Sarah: I wish our girl will be the prettiest baby in the whole world.2
Josh:Yes,but even if she was,you will be the most beautiful for me.3
He looked admiringly at those hazel eyes which attracted him so much.Sarah nudged him at his ribs.4
Sarah: Oh Josh!But what do we name her?I am so glad we were able to find the gender...5
Josh:That was illegal.6
Sarah:Yes but still,it is a bit relaxing when you know the gender.7
She looks longingly at the enquiring eyes of Josh and chuckles because Sarah coaxed the doctor into telling the gender of the baby even though Josh was against it.Josh turns away from that intoxicating look.8
Josh:Maybe we should call her Jo.9
Sarah:Very funny.She is my kid too.10
Sarah looks threateningly at Josh.At that time a burly man dressed in black raised his gun and announced that the plane was hijacked.In a short while the flight landed at Kandahar,the burly man lifted a tuft of Sarah's auburn hair and gazed into her pale eyes.Josh pushed the man away and held Sarah close to him.11
The man was angry and shot a bullet straight through Josh's heart.Josh fell dead and cold on Sarah's lap leaving behind the dreams of a pretty girl called Jo.12
Author notes
This is dedicated to Rupin Katiyal,aged 25 who was shot dead in December 1999 when the IA flight IC 814 was hijacked to Afghanistan.Rupin was killed when he tried to prevent the harassment of his wife.
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it is sad because the end is very sad it hurts because me little brother is named josh.
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Thanx for the suggestions!Well I just want to tell you that this piece is just a reflection not essentially a short story..My whole collection of Sarah and josh are like this only..Whenever I read a news article that affects me..I put it in a kind of way that fits in Sarah and Josh..For example my earlier Sarah and Josh was on Tsunami victims..You must read that too..Then you will understand what I mean!
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You could have put those valuable suggestions you IMed me here itself..It would have helped others too..Well I just want to tell you that this piece is just a reflection and not essentially a short story..My whole collection of Sarah and josh are like this only..Whenever I read a news article that affects me..I put it in a kind of way that fits in Sarah and Josh..For example my earlier Sarah and Josh was on Tsunami victims..You must read that too..Then you will understand what I mean!
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Thanx di cuz.
..meet you soon..I am working on a thriller short story currently..I guess you will like it aorable YETI!!!
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Porchi,
I see a lot of compliments on this one, and I agree that it is indeed nice to see such a dedication.
About this story, it could have been a good story if you included detailed descriptions because this piece completely lacks imagery, and it seems incomplete. I don't quite like the perspective you have tried to potray it from, since it is a little abstract, and could have been potrayed in a better way.
I wonder why you used dialogues in this piece. It does not make this piece a proper story or a proper play; it's just a piece.
Overall, yes, this piece contains substance, but a little more effort would work wonders.
Keep writing.
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Excellent
P, I can't believe I haven't read this, wow! Amazing story, just so wonderfully written! You are always full of surprises, you are such a talented girl. Bravo!
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Excellent!!!
An interesting story, goldy and yes true events we read about in the news papers or see in TV can make a good story. I did not know the stroy so I am not arguing. But you have proved here you are great story teller as well and that is some thing to be noticed.
You have made a good start and follow it up and good luck to you. There is more I want to tell about this but will tell you on IM and not here
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Thanx for the comment..It means so much to me..And yeah the first write of mine you comment on after a looong time..thanx buddy!
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3 Stars ***
oh dear
... its too muc sad wad ... really... i didnt know about this incedent before i read it from you... sadly it had a sad effect on me
nice write... good work.. thanks for sharing my dear friend
hugs and kisseS
gives choco
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend.............. just keep it up................. your humble little friend ...............
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.................. ................ - vic ( who else???? )
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Oh..maybe..but I read about this in an article two months back I guess..And it said they harassed his wife..No idea..Press mess up I guess..anyway he was still too young to get shot at..
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Ohhh.....this was a great story but with such a tragic end. Your work was quite poignant and you described the emotions of the would-be parents perfectly well. By the way, as per what I've read, the hijackers didn't harass his wife...in fact, in one interview, she even said that they called her their "sister" and had even gifted her a shawl. I think Rupin Katyal was killed when he protested too much.
Anyway, great story and very well-penned down.
Keep writing.
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mm.. wow! it definitely has a impact.. tho I dont know whicheth time I'm reading it... short and powerful... great work cuz!
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