I cried-and then, I Saw You

Looking outside my window,1

I watched the trees thrash their branches,2

the wind was strong, and the rain heavy.3

Lightening struck an suddenly I was outside.4

I raised my head and let my hair blow in the wind.5

I cried, oh god, I cried.  I cried for you,6

because I missed you so much.  7

I spread my arms wide,8

and embraced the rain, my tears mingled in well. I need you!9

I yelled, and screamed, and no one heard me against the thunder.10

Why did you leave me why! My soul cried out, the rain was coming down in sheets, and I stood there soaked, my soul was a black hole.  Why did you die?11

I loved you, I loved you so much.12

And then you were standing there. 13

In a strike of lightening, that would have hit me,14

you were standing there, outlined by white electricity.15

You touched me, you kissed me.16

I'll always be with you I love you, be at peace.17

I can't rest if you mourn me, let me go.18

Let me go.........Then it was gone, and I cried, I cried.19

I turn to go inside, and I saw you there, in my mind, your corpse burning from cremation, and I saw you screaming, I saw you, and I cried.  And suddenly, I saw you whole, and happy, and I let you go.20

I let you go.........but it would never be the same..........21

Author notes

This is a poem on mourning, inspired by my own characters, I just finished a story, I hate to end with sorrow, but this time I did, and the sadness of the characters stayed with me so I wrote this.

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  • KimKat
    October 8, 2005
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    wow, this is another great write, i love the imagery in this - it's a very beautiful and moving write

    xxxxx kymm xxxxx

  • Street Spirit
    September 30, 2005
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    Wow that was gorgeous. Very beautiful, and so sad... it just broke my heart. I can't imagine being in that situation. *sigh* wow.

  • Jiffer
    September 29, 2005
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    oh wow, that's so, I hate losing some I love, god, it was so beauifully tragic. Wicked cool.