Behind Her Eyes Chapter Four

I cried like a baby for what felt like hours. My best friend ditching me because I'm not rich like her. How could she sink so low? This would mean all my friends would do this to me and I'd be the girl sitting by herself at lunch. I'm surprised Eric was still even talking to me. 1

I jumped when I heard a knock at my door. I wiped my cheeks and the smudged makeup off my face trying to make it look like I wasn't crying. 2

"Come in." I whispered. My mother entered the room and sat on the edge of my bed. Her eyes were puffy and red probably from crying. She was so beautiful and in such pain. I had never noticed this before, and now I did after all those years I was selfish and rude to her.3

"Baby you look upset. What's wrong?" She asked me. I didn't want to tell her, and I was afraid if I did I would cry again. I shook my head. "It's obviously not nothing. I can tell you've been crying." Damnit. Mother's were so good at being able to tell.4

"T-t-tiffany said we can't b-b-be friend-s anymore be-be-because I'm poor." I said between sobs. I was crying now. I wasn't upset because we were poor, I was upset because of her ditching me and I hoped my mother understood that. 5

"Oh baby, ignore her. She's not a true friend if she ditches you because you're not rich. What did Eric say?" My mother asked stroking my thin brown hair.6

"He said he will hel-hel-help me in anyway he c-c-can." I replied. At least he was still there for me just like Tiffany should be.7

"Now that's a true friend. I never liked Tiffany anyways. She's spoiled rotten and a total bitch. You're better off without her I promise and you'll find new friends, I guarntee." She kissed my forehead and left the room. Maybe she was right, maybe it was a good thing that Tiffany bailed. I could always make new friends. 8

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I entered school the next day and it seemed like everyone was watching me. Numerous people came up to me and patted me on the back saying I'm sorry. This was weird. How did everyone know about what had happened? I mean I know it was on the news but my mom had requested not to reveal our identity. There was no way anyone knew except Eric and Tiffany. Could one of them have told? 10

I saw Tiffany standing by her locker with her boyfriend Jason. I came up behind her and tapped her on the shoulder. She turned to look at me and then turned away obviously embarassed to be seen by me. I kept tapping her until finally she gave in.11

"Make this quick or my rep will be endangered." She warned her eyes wandering the hallway making sure no one of importance was around to see me talking to her.12

"Did you tell everyone?" I asked. I had a strong feeling it was her. Eric wouldn't pull a stunt like this.13

"Yeah. They needed to know." She said shutting her locker and taking Jason's hand, flipping her blonde hair over her shoulder as she walked away. 14

"POOR LOSER! HAVING FUN ROAMING THE STREETS AS A HOMELESS HOBO?!?" Some jock yelled at me, I felt tears in my eyes. I was very sensitive about this. But he wasn't the only one who had said this to me all day. By lunch time no one would talk to me and Eric was absent so I was alone, crying my eyes out.15

"Hey, I'm Abi." I looked up to see a girl with glasses, red hair and braces sit down next to me.16

"I'm Lizzy. Aren't you embarassed to be seen with me like everyone else is?" I was confused. Why was she talking to me?17

"No, I'm not a bitch. I think you seem cool, and I don't think it matters if you're rich or poor." She said unwrapping her sandwich and taking a bite. It smelled of peanut butter. My favorite.18

"Thanks, I wish everyone was the same way." I replied rolling my eyes.19

"Don't worry. I got your back, I won't bail on you even if you're a homeless hobo." She giggled and smiled. "Would you like a bite?" She offered part of her sandwich to me. I nodded and for the first time in a while I actually smiled.20

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  • Diaboro
    August 23

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    Hey Sammiwammi. When I was reading the first few paragraphs of your story, I was about to lose my interest in the story, but I kept going in the interest that the story would have some sort of derailment, hoping that this is not another teenage depression story.

    I could have sworn that I've read a similar story earlier on this website, but the good thing is, your style of writing is very understandable and easy to comprehend, I had no problem wooshing through it, without having to read confusing sentences.

    In the end, I'd like to give you an advice from my novice experience, Practice! That's it and good luck .

  • Sean500
    August 23

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    There you go. A true friend. Thanks for taking my idea. Maybe a little more detail. I think it was a little too much studering on par. 5 but other than that it was wonderful.

    beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 3.