The Magic Carpet

One day there was there was a boy called Nathan. And he worked night and day and had a very poor family. One day when he was looking for food He saw a very beautiful and expensive carpet Nathan stared at the beautiful carpet and wished that he cod have that carpet. Suddenly he fell into a deep sleep.1

Suddenly he thought he woke up in an amazing fright, a carpet wooshed by. Suddenly millions of carpets wooshed by. "Whats happening?" said Nathan. "Hu?". Bang! He woke up again and suddenly he got back home and had a cup of tea.2

The End

This is my first story, what do you think>

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  • NarniaKid
    August 25

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    For you're first story, this is great! It needs editing though. I found a few mistakes. And you used the word 'Suddenly' a lot. Try using different words!
    Brilliant Job and Keep Writing!

    -Crystal