Dreamer's Reality.

It's nearing sunrise on a cool autumn morning, when a car pulls over at the side of a non-descript dirt road. The driver, Griffin, turns to his companion, Adriena, and the two sit in heavy silence for a few minutes. Both replay the events of the previous night over and over : Adia's tearful call to Griffin, the packing of whatever of her belongings would fit into Griffin's car, their driving aimlessly until the sky had finally started to stain the sky red.1

Griffin's hands rest on the steering wheel, his dark eyes trained to the sky, even as Adriena reaches over to run her fingers through his brown hair. They're the type of stunningly beautiful couple who
look like they belong together, Adriena with her rich, dark hair and Griffin with his deep brown eyes. But right now, there's something uncomfortable about the way they avoid each other's eyes.2

Adriena [her eyes focused on the rising sun]. Will you marry me?3

[Griffin visibly starts, turning quickly to try and meet her eyes. Adriena, however, refuses to acknowledge the look].4

Griffin. Right now? This very second?5

Adriena. Today. We'll elope.6

Griffin. No.7

[The silence that descends is even heavier than the first, but Adriena's now too busy nursing her hurt to notice. Her body language changes, her fingers stray from his hair. For the first time, she's not in physical contact with him. Griffin opens his mouth to explain a few times before settling on his answer].8

Griffin. We're young.9

Adriena. Yes, I suppose so.10

Griffin. 19's young!11

Adriena. I agreed with you.12

[Griffin sighs audibly. He tries to touch her, but she doesn't melt the way she seems like she should.]13

Griffin. Don't tell me you're mad.14

Adriena. Not at all. Can we get driving? I need breakfast.15

Griffin. God, there's no talking to you, is there?16

[Adriena's silent for so long that Griffin sighs and puts the key back in the ignition. Before he can start the car, Adriena speaks, still not looking at him.]17

Adriena. We're in way over our heads.18

Griffin [looking puzzled]. How so?19

Adriena. I know you don't see it. But life's not as easy as you want it to be. And we're too different.20

Griffin. You called me in the middle of the night, Adia. Not the other way around. And too different for what?21

Adriena. Too different to do much more than be in love.22

Griffin. You're crazy.23

Adriena. And I always have been. But I know one thing for sure. We're too very solitary creatures, although we both love the idea of love. Being with you means we're not two separate lives anymore, and you're not ready for that.24

Griffin. Oh, now it's me, eh? We went from we to me pretty quick there. 25

Adriena. Maybe. Are you saying I'm not right? That I'm crazy to think that reality's too hard for two dreamers like us?26

Griffin. Hard yes, but not too hard. Adia, why did you call me?27

Adriena. I think because, for a split second, I thought I could live a life other than my own.28

Griffin. So what are you saying?29

[Adriena mulls it over before responding, to Griffin's obvious impatience].30

Adriena. Do you think it's possible to love someone more than life itself, but still not be meant to be together?31

Griffin. No.32

Adriena. I do.33

Author notes

I think I like how this ends, although it really doesn't. I like the way her "I do" mirrors her original question of "Will you marry me?". It seems to come full circle, and yet, doesn't.

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  • Seething Love
    February 22, 2006
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    this was and immensely deep piece...and i liked how you were able to add some complication to the story without sacrificing the feeling of reality. the characters were so well fleshed out in the story and yet it took me only a minute or two to read it that takes real talent!


  • Oleander
    January 19, 2006
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    That's a perfect ending, I agree with your comment too. That's exactly what I thought. The last sentence makes the story a profound statement, that you can love someone even if you're not meant to be together.

  • Marrow
    September 29, 2005
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    This was brilliant, Kestryl. Seriously, this was out of the ballpark. As for as my personal opinions go, this week you are one out of a very small number who have written two above average pieces that stand out immensely. I definitely commend you.
    Justin

  • Amunet Wolfbane
    September 27, 2005
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    I agree interesting and nice imagery. Gypsy

  • lavender shadows
    September 26, 2005
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    Ooh, I really love this, it's so interesting! The ending is really cool! This is such a cool story as well, it's really neat!

    Great job! Best of luck with this!

    ~lavender shadows~

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