There's pain.1
It's funny how the only thing I can feel now is pain, after all I did, after all the people left in my wake.2
Perhaps I should explain myself. Once upon a time, I was the top of the army of Lucifer. Fear and wonder were heaped upon my name like dirt upon a corpse, and soon my legend grew to rival the likes of Satan, God, and Jesus themselves. All I could think about was dominating the land of mortals, to one day stand upon the unnamed mountains and, with the faintest flicker of my mind, carve my likeness into the living rock.3
It's amazing how quickly religious deities turn their heads towards you when you threaten their power. First came The Father Of Lies, his army vastly dwindled due to the treason of his minions to my side. I scattered his force like sand into the river Styx. Feeling that he had some chance to annihilate me after the first battle, Jesus came leading an army of Muslims and whoever else would follow. Their blood stained the battleground in seconds. 4
Interestingly enough, God came with no army, thinking that he would fare no better than the former armies. My legion attacked, and was slaughtered with barely a flicker of His mind. In a rush of dark magic, I rode to face Him with all that I could muster. And I slaughtered God.5
It's funny how the only thing I can feel now is pain. The cries and prayers of so many people, so many needs, ripping my mind to shreds. So much in so little. Pain. . . encompasses. . . me.6
Author notes
Just to let ya'll know, this takes place in all of 5 minutes. This is my first story thing in around 3 years, so it's probably not very good. Enjoy, though.
With a sword of hope and a pen of darkness,
Sir Dakkon
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I do agree that this is more prosey than an actual dialogue, so that will be the reason you'll score a little less than normal this week. Just pick up, and slaughter next week as you always do.
Justin -
Very well written and quite the fascinating read. Much enjoyed and understood here
Gypsy
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I like this, but I have to say that if this is mission 8, it's far more like a piece of prose than a dialogue or script. Actually, it's more a monologue than anything. I don't know if monologues count, but usually a dialogue by definition consists of one or more characters having a conversation. You may want to check this with Justin, just in case!
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glad you found what you needed...whether it be god or poetry or whatever. i just takes looking into oneself to draw up strength. not a keen fan of this format or theme, but it seems an inspirational write.
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Interesting write. I can't say much as I need to be going, but I do like the irony of this story. It does say a lot about how strong God must be in order to cope with all the humans on this planet, no? I could never take on such a job.
I enjoyed this completely. It is quite the satirical story. I would only suggest you proofread and replace some redundant words. Otherwise, leave it.
Very nicely done; an excellent piece.
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Hey, wow I'm not sure what to say. It is a great story, you have much talent and I love this peice but, I don't know, it pulls at my heartstrings, it stabs me deep. I am sorry if this doesnt make sense.
Nice Write.
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Very well written. Wouldn't say I like the subject matter, but it still is an excellently written piece.
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