Out of my mind

I'm almost too tired to hold this pen
Everything is slipping away again
And I don't know where its gone1

Hearing things that arent there
Feeling things that arent fair2

I can't see clearly, don't know what to do
Because I can't think straight
When its all about you3

And I
can't get
you out
of my
mind4


-Andi

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-Andi

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  • CallMeWhenUrRich
    August 24

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    Awww, this is so sweet and beautiful.

    I found myself smiling uncontroabky throught the entire poem, just sweet, Andi. Marvelous, I loved it.

    You have a way with words. Keep writing!


  • therenaissancegirl gold member
    August 21
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    Beautiful. One of my favorite poems so far on this site.


  • Farhan gold member
    August 21
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    Very nice. I liked this one also. Most of all, i liked the last four lines
    And I
    can't get
    you out
    of my
    mind.
    And i think, you should revise the title. But apart from it, the whole poem was really good.
    Very good indeed.