Bite my tongue,
To stop the lies that I have spun,
My head is spinning,
The darkness has become,
The pain inside it's,
Everything that consumes me,
I will fall again, (fall again)
I will feel the pain. (feel the pain)1
Bite my cheeks,
I am fighting,
As darkness falls,
I am slowly dying (I'm dying)
My eyes tell of what I fear,
It reminds me that no one cares. (No one cares)2
The ground fills up of my worthless tears,
How long have I felt this way?
Minutes,hours, days they add up to years.
My heart is bruised and now its slowly beating,
This life is breaking and defeating,
...me (me)3
Bite my cheeks,
I am fighting,
As darkness falls,
I am slowly dying (I'm dying)
My eyes tell of what I fear,
It reminds me that no one cares. (No one cares)4
Bite my cheeks,
I am fighting,
As darkness falls,
I am slowly dying (I'm dying)
My eyes tell of what I fear,
It reminds me that no one......no one Cares.5
*softer music now*6
I look up to the sky and the clouds are parting,
The shades of gray are brightened,
The darkness that filled me,
Is now departing (gone away)
(Gone Away....Gone Away...)
Author notes
Original song. The brackets are the words I want to be screamed. I want this song to have an eyes set to kill vibe. I hope you like this even though it is a cliche' song. It's something I seem to always write about but I guess that's what I'm passionate about. Dark and painful. Life's not an easy road. You get tossed, turned and only the strong will make it through.
Life's a b!t** if you let it become a b!t**.
Yes. This is not my best work, but I am trying. I am hanging on to the edge and am slowly trying to pull myself back out of the slump.
I hope you enjoy my song.
Comments
1 - 6 of 6
-
I enjoyed this loads, and as for the Lifes not an easy road, i totaly agree there, but i prefer a few bumps in the road rather than having a smoth and boring ride lol and as for the song beying cliche .... i have to disagree, this wasn't cliche to me at all!! Verry well writen lyrics!! ^_^
-
Well, hallelujah, I have finally found someone on this website who can write lyrics.
Wow, great job. You have a lot of talent as a lyricist.
-
um wow?
hey this is really kol! but man when i hanged out with you, you were always the happy type. . . so much has changed (sigh) haha so um wats happend to make you write like this and stuff??? oh and rose says hi
-
A bit sad, but I liked the optimistic ending. Very teenaged angst. It's good to rant a bit and get it all out of the system. It read well and did have a lyrical tone.
-
Hey, beautiful. This is just incredible, you really should try to get somewhere with these. Because one day, when I'm driving down the highway I want to turn on the radio, here these lyrics, and be like I know her! :]
This is so powerful, meaningful, strong. It gives you goosebumps and it's probably gonna be one of those songs that you don't want to end if you do deciede to sing it. Which you should! Because that'd legitlly be the coolest thing in the world.
I love the AN, so true, so true. You speak the truth, I'm glad to say, and you're not afraid of that. Which is also great!
Keep on writing and being amazing.
Love you.
Paper.thin.paradox
-
I think this is great. I didn't think it was cliche at all, and though I cannot write lyrics myself, it was instantly obvious as to what these were. I think you did a great job of eloquently expressing the feelings and emotions, clear but not too detailed, leaving space for the reader to 'breathe' as such, and consider the feelings for themselves.
I also think your use of brackets for the screaming parts worked well, and how you gave faint indications as to the music. Maybe even a couple more of these would be good, it makes the song seem more alive and easier to imagine.
I actually think that the part in your A/N was very very good, about the tossed and turned and only the strong will make it through. I don't suppose you could add something like that in your song? It's just such a great line.
Anyway, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It flows nicely, the verses tie together well and simple effects such as the repetition worked great! I really really liked it and you should definitely continue to write lyrics, especially if this is "not [your] best work". Great job indeed!
~Luck&Love~
Adding your comment:
1 - 6 of 6
