the door

A night on the town leads two teen boy's on a strange adventure in a their small cold sleepy town of Denver, Colorado 1985.1


The night was cold and young fulled of the same-thing as they do day in and day out. Their town was nothing, but a cold area not fulled of anything for the teen to do. The town was known for their work and their humbleness for people that comes to visit their little area. Thing's on this town was not as what they seemed to be as the two teen boy's will soon compare their thoughts on the town that they called home.
The town has a dark secrete to be told, but never told the kids of their hometown. Until know when the secrete was found by the two boys.2

Ben and Larry two best friends never apart from each other they never had brothers or sisters to fight and play with while they was growing in the town. Their family was known for their wealth in the mining coals and gold, silver and cooper.
But the two boys never thought that their life was about to take a strange turn for the worst. The night was cool as normally when it's below -0.6 in their town. Night sky was fulled up with stars and the full moon as well, no clouds in the sky to count for. The boys took a walk down to the park in Cambridge where they go to hide from the world and the mess of their family wealth. Setting down drink a bottle of Scotch Davis they was looking up at the sky looking the stars twinkling at each other while talked and laughed at something that each other was talking about.3

Something in the sky catches the boys eyes as they was looking at the stars. They thought they was seeing something in the sky because they was drinking the boys clear their heads and thought about what they had seen in the sky. Ben wanted to back to the house and pack up his old clothing for the Salvation Army that his parents was helping out with. Larry decided to go and do the same-thing as Ben was doing just because he needed an outlet for a displace teen anger.4

Larry and Ben both walked back to the house that they lived in to pack their clothing and some old toys that they no longer played with since they was kids.

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  • snoble
    August 23

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    you had a few misspeliign until now not know know sound like no ok but its means you know things like your smart. it was not to good not to bad. sorta childlike but not half bad. i like it althought there were other gramical errors i dont really know how to fix they just didnt sound right

  • Okay, when is this set? Is it during modern times or in the past or future. If it's in the current time, I just have to say I live in Denver, Colorado, and it's not small or sleepy. It's the capital and there's plenty of things to do. Sorry, but home town pride dictates I stick up for my city if you're going to use a real town, you should know how it is. If it's set in pioneer days, yeah, maybe you're okay but I think you should make that clearer.


    • blackfang4318
      August 23
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      i am so so sorry about that i dont mean no harm about denver what so ever i am truly so sorry it came to me in the head like everything eles
      i am from jackson, mississippi i have no idea what it look like up their like i said before i am sorry about that