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The tale that I have disclosed between these pages is one that has been forgotten for millenia. Once upon a time the entire face of the Earth knew of this legend and of the fated prophecy that it foretold. My family however are now the only people that have a memory of it. My intent is to both keep it alive and to give heed to those who have forgotten. For it will fall to them to destroy what is to come and to learn how to stay in this world they have created for themselves.1

Most of what I have to tell may be disheartening to some, but it is the truth and it must be said. I believe that there are two sides to a life, and a deep chasm separates them. In order for a soul to become what it was meant to be it must first cross a bridge into the unknown. It takes great courage and is usually only accomplished if that person feels an enormous fear.2

Fear is what will keep them alive, but for some it can be paralyzing and will end their journey earlier than planned. It is essential that the ones who are to come reach the other side of that abyss and I intend to make certain that happens. Even if it means my life must come to a close for them to survive.3

It is with a great sacrifice of their former selves that they fulfill their destiny and are able to understand the meaning in the legend, and translate the prophecy that could destroy everything we hold dear.

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i haven't figured out a title for this yet. i only just wrote it like a day ago so its still a work in progress. please comment and tell me if its good. caylierose

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  • MiSsY WiCkEd
    September 16

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    It's good. I like the whole chasmy soul bit. You could cut some of the destiny crap out though. The fact that it's untitled drew me to it, so I'd keep it that way until I got a kick ass name. I do like the style it's written in. Good luck with this.


  • huntinger
    August 18

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    Hmm

    Firstly you might want to change the font colour or the background as it's not that easy to read. I shouldn't have to highlight the page to be able to read it.

    Secondly there are a fair few spelling and grammatical errors;
    [profecy] is spelt Prophecy,
    [My family however is now the only] should be, My family however are now the only.
    [memorie] is spelt Memory.
    [casm] is spelt Chasm.
    [Start of paragraph 3] you missed the r on fear.
    [paralizing] is spelt Paralyzing.
    [forfill] is spelt Fulfill.

    Sorry to be so picky but it would just read better. Other than that the idea does sound interesting, but use a spell check before you post to minimize on any errors.


    • caylierose
      August 18
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      omg thanxs for telling me about the miss spellings. i typed it so fast cause i had to go somewhere that i didnt bother to go back and reread. and i have no problems with the pickyness cause that helps alot. thanxs again.
      -caylierose