Blooded Rose (Prose) [6]

Please Alison, go to school for mommy?
I am not your daughter, my "mommy"
Is dead
All good little girls go to school though!
I'm thirteen, why must you baby me?
You will always be my precious little baby!
You never even knew me as a baby
Wench...
Stop being so cruel to your mother!
I already told you
You are not my mother!
Just tell me you love me and be on your way.
I'd tell you that
But I don't want to make
Empty promices1

Forced here in
This hellish school
Miss Caviardia's Academy For Girls
Just the name is enough to make you upchuck your lunch
No one wants a name as dopey
As Miss Caviardia
Or to go to a school with it
For that matter2

Dunces...
They littler this place
Like unkept trash
Or overgrown weeds
Why don't they just leave me someplace far away
I'm already smarter all in my grade3

Away
Away from this place
Away
I just want to be...
Away

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  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    August 17

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    I'm making progress.

    I like this, but is she going to kill off her "mother", the wicked wench? Actually, the woman seems caring enough, maybe your main character just doesn't know how to accept love.

    p1 You might use quotation marks in this dialogue to separate the speakers and make it a bit easier to read.

    p3 smarter [than] all


    Andy


    • Len Shadow
      August 17

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      I've read a couple prose stories, and they don't seem to use quotation marks. Then again, they both have rich text editing and show it another way. They push it off to the right side.
      I'm gold membershipless so I'll have to suffer with quotation marks. Thanks for telling me.

      ~Len