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Standing near a waterfall, the water gracefully flowing off of the body of a boy, his simple complexion makes him appear to be around sixteen or nineteen. Slowly the water droplets slid down his light brown skin. The shape of his face was narrow as where the sides, which met into a seemingly rounded chin with a few facial hairs sticking outward. Long strands of pale blond hair flowed down to his shoulders and past his shoulder blades on his back. On his back were two long deep gashes, that moved with each little motion of his back. The ears were medium sized and curved out a little bit. Though that enabled him to pick up certain noises that some people could not hear. 2
His nose was regular sized, nothing really special about this body part. The lips, ah, they were very soft and smooth, they were narrow in width but thick in length. His eyes were sleek and long, yet small in width. The irises were a bright sea green, a color that would put any wary eye into a deep trance. The stare from his eyes were lonely and filled with sadness, somehow he hides behind a past to be left behind within them. His throat was narrow and long. His Adam’s Apple protruded out a little too far, that would make is seem that he would be older than sixteen or nineteen. The torso was skinny, so skinny that most of the ribs could be seen straight through the skin. On any normal male the pecks would be firm and visible, however on this boy such things were not. His chest was not toned, though he did have a six-pack that was so discrete one would have to feel his flesh to notice the six-pack. If one were to punch the boy in his stomach, the boy would have a long road to recovery. Slender and relatively long arms were touching his long light kissed hair. Though his arms were bony, the scar on his left arm suggests his fighting ability. Due to the appearance of the arms, he does not rely on strength per-say but rather on speed, skill, and most likely grace.3
His legs were long and thin, the reason for his huge height of five feet, nine inches, just a little shy of six feet. The thighs were wide and very meaty. Slowly he crept out of the pool of water and onto a ledge of rocks, revealing his smooth legs reflecting the moonlight. With a swift slice of the wind, he kicked the air, the force of his leg was very powerful. Long into the night the boy stared at the moon, as a few feathers floated away in the waterfall pool. 4
Author notes
i submitted this for my creative writting class. i did blush a lot during this, because i am a guy and this was very creepy for me to do this. enjoy!
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Very nice! The descriptions are awesome.
~Amanda -
more more more!
ooh, I like.
One of my obsessions is really tall thin guys...keep up the good work! -
Teehee, this description made me smile and giggle out loud (I had to expain it to my friend in the other room) and overall, tis an excellent portrait of an angel. I wanna squuuueeeeze him!
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wowowwowwow ur very goood at description i cannot describe men!!ha. anyways Im not really excited about reading about those typa guys, i mostly like character and cute, but not angelic type. anyways it was a brillinat write and i hope to see more in the future. all my love and luck(in that case stay out of my luck or ull end up in a garbage can
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anna
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Loved it!
I really like all of the description in it, and you did an awesome job on your wording. Really a great piece. -
This is interesting, and the description is good. Try making your sentences smoother, and why DID you put it in erotica? It's not that bad lol. Overall, great write, you paint a lovely picture. Keep it up!
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lol. . .okay your right it would be really creepy to here you read this out loud. Other than that the decriptions are very good. I might be wrong but i noticed that you talk a lot about his light hair. Word of advice redundancy is never good stories. Other than that the way you go about describing the boy makes him real as if he is someone i know.
Good job you deserve applause
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thank you very much! your comment made me happy!
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haha, good job on the describtion though, very... nice, lol, would be neat if this had a story to go along with it. Good job.
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