The real me!!
I'll tell you about the real me
Just give me a moment and you'll just see
You'll see every thing I want to be1
I am very fun to be around
especially when its time to get down
Get down and dance and be free
To do what I do best and just do me2
When I Grow up I want to be a nurse
So lay back sit down let me give you a free verse
I love helping people a lot
Just to come up with great plots
So just relax let me give you a shot
Hope you like that cause some people find that hot3
I like to party and have lots of fun
If you feel me just stand up
Just holla at me tell me what sup.4
I like junk food
Well just sometimes mostly when I'm in the mood
Well I guess that concludes candy
Which I always Keep handy5
Well that's all you want to know about me
I guess that's it for now I am off for my shopping spree.
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Comments
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I Love it
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 2, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Aww.
I like it-made me smile
I don't know if "Grow"-Stz3,ln1 and "Keep"-Stz5,ln4 are meant to be in caps-just to point out the grammatical error there. Great job. Keep up the good work!



