Life In A Cyclone

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Author notes

Mostly just looking for comments on this first part of the story , I'm kind of lost as to where to take it now... like do I continue wih Basilisk or would now be a good time to enter a new charector

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  • April Love
    October 30, 2005
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    i liked this very much. a good story.


  • becks place
    October 30, 2005
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    The opening stanza draws the reader into the story that will unfold in this write. Very powerful, and excellent narrative and imagery - seems a bit unfinished, so I await the next chapter.


  • Comes to Cross
    October 30, 2005
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    Great Poem! I really enjoyed it! It really made me think!

    Kevin

  • FearzBTearz
    September 20, 2005
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    Great beginning for a stroy line

    Totaly loved the part about the royal joliet, the story line kept my attention, it gives a setting and an atmosphere but 14 years there as to be a lot more to the story, I hope this is one you are still working on.. more chapters to I hope...