they should be afraid

The Village of Wright had no knowledge of how to run a village at all. They had no castles, like the rest in that time, because none of the villagers had ever seen another society at all. They had heard of them, but very faintly. You see, the Village of Wright was located in the middle of rocky hills, a place no one would ever dare to walk through. The closest neighboring village was a marathon away and in between the two, was a long walk too unbearable for anyone to willingly take.1

No one knew how the villagers had gotten there, but the question still remains unanswered about how any of us got anywhere so they just, more or less, thought it was evolution and put that question to rest. One villager, in particular, seemed to rise above the rest early on. Her name was Lokuc and she had been the village’s ruler for four years. Before that, the town was fairly unorganized, with a small government who hadn’t an idea of what they were doing.2

Lokuc stepped in and changed all of that, creating a calm and peaceful city. She was a very self-determined woman, with her head in the right place. She had morals and values that came in whenever she made a decision and, for the most part, she was quite a loner. Now, I suppose, in this time period, the thought of a woman ruler would be unheard of but this town just walked on not even thinking that they could be doing something wrong. Or right.3

Lokuc taught the village how to farm and to work. She taught that earning your own would bring happiness and hence, everyone in the town was happy.4

But then, in the midst of Lokuc’s four-year reign, and outsider came in to challenge her. He came on a sunny day, where everyone was minding their own business in the center of town. He had black wings and from the sky, almost resembled a vulture. He swept down suddenly and disturbed the town square. Everyone gasped and held on to their children tightly. The vulture-creature demanded water at once and he got some very quickly. The townspeople were scared and very confused but they were sure he was not one to mess with.5

You see, the beast had been flying around for days looking for his prey. In the sky, the Village of Wright looked charming and different and he was sure he had never seen it before. So, he checked it out and sure enough, he spotted his new challenge.6

He looked around and asked where he could speak to the ruler of this ungodly town.7

Kasbe, a shy old father, trembled and replied “Over there, sir,” and then pointed to Lokuc’s hut at the corner of town.8

“Ha! Where is your castle?” He asked. “How do you guard your city? Do you have an army at all? Hm. Well, this is interesting. I must speak to your ruler at once. I need reasons for his way of ruling.”9

“It’s a ‘she’, sir,” Kasbe stammered.10

“A woman?” He asked and then laughed at them again.11

The vulture-creature shouted to the townspeople for minutes longer, telling them that they should be afraid for there was much to fear, that what lies ahead will only be trouble, and if they were smart, then they would surrender. He said that he had planned to be their new ruler and capture their lang. He said that he would send for his army if he needed to and that without a fortress, they could come in easily. He left his words at that and then flapped his wings and flew away.12

People began to talk the minute he left the ground. Those eyes! They would say. Those words! They would comment. A little boy ran to Lokuc at once to tell her the news.13

“Lokuc! Lokuc! A beast just came into town! He told us to surrender—to be scared! He said he would take everything,” he said, with an emphasis on everything.14

“Slow down, young on. What did he look like?”15

“He had eyes of devil: pure red and wide open just overflowing with evil. He had wings, Lokuc! WINGS! And he came right form the sky. He was big and dark and dressed in all black.”16

“What did he say?”17

“He said he would capture the village and that he could do it because he was powerful and we didn’t have a fortress to protect ourselves. He said he could be just like a drain and although there is much water in a lake, he can suck us all down, whirling like a tornado, and weakening with every second.”18

Lokuc thought for a second and then replied, “Well, a drain only works form the bottom and we wont let him get under us. We will be ready for his next appearance. Did he say when he would be back?”19

“No, Lokuc.”20

“Well, we will be ready.”21

And the little boy believed her because she was wise.22

Lokuc held a village meeting just in time and told the town of her plan. The vulture-creature joined them later that night. He came with no army but he stated that he was ready to take them over and repeated that all would be easier if they just surrendered. But they had no motives in doing so. Just as Lokuc had told them, the village people stood behind her, with no weapons but their own eyes.23

The vulture-creature watched and waited for fear to enter them but as the seconds rolled on without doing so, it began to do just the opposite. He watched them and saw that they weren’t weak, but brave and that was the scariest thing he had ever witnessed.24

Later that night, he flew away to his army who walked on and took over other cities. Never did they come back to Wright though, the village without a fortress that they never could capture.25

Author notes

I wanted to elaborate on the fact that the bad guy in the story is always the one feared, as if he is stronger. I wanted, for once, people who were doing something good to put fear in someones eyes, as it should be. Isnt a person willing to do the right thing stronger than any threat or bad guy?

However, I find the writing, not the story so much, to be boring.

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  • leo2
    September 18, 2005
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    A hopeful short story with a moral. How nice. I did notice on at least two occassions you spelled the the 'from'.....'form'. One other typo was just a simple slip of keys.. 'lang' instead of 'lang'.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long