A silver ghost in the moonlit night,
Flickering, flowing through the trees,
Her magical form of spiritual light,
Her paws as soft as a gentle breeze,
Her musical song is a mournful cry,
Resounding out over the land,
Howling out to the midnight sky,
She begs for them to understand,
The she-wolf fights for freedom,
Because she is the wolf queen,
The ruler of her mighty kingdom,
The most powerful beauty ever seen.1
Author notes
I wrote this a while a go, so technically it is a prewrite. I feel that it could be improved but I'm not sure how to make it better. Any feedback would be appreciated 
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Very, very nice! Though I am more of a prose person, the poem was very well done and I did not find fault with it.
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As Violette said you should try to think of a stanza set that would be able to make it flow even more than it is already, I love to read poems and have written many. The imagery is amazing in this. This is truly a work of art, I love wolves and this is the first poem I have actually read about wolves, I will have to go and write a couple now! You could inspire so many people with this!
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Oh awesome poem, to improve i would suggest seperating the lines a little bit so we can fully appreciate the rhythm.
beginning: 5, language: 5, ending: 5.
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I really enjoyed this poem...
...as the imagery complimented perfectly the language of the piece
Um, the only constructive criticism I may share is for the line; "Resounding out over the land", I would suggest removing the word 'out' as it isn't needed, especially how it's also in the next line. But overall, this is a fantastic poem in my opinion or even an 'ode' to your She-Wolf 
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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