Chapter 11
Wyn woke up from her deep sleep. Questions swam through her head. How long has it been? What happened to the dragons? Did it work?2
She stood up and looked around. She was still in the sea cavern. But what happened to Saya? Wyn had used the spell on her too, hadn't she?3
Holding her breath, she dived into the underwater tunnel and swam to the entrance, looking for Saya. Schools of colorful fish and other marine life fled at the sight of her. The coral reef that surounded the cavern was a little bigger than she remembered, unsuprisingly. Everthing looked alive and happy. All the same, what she saw made her feel sick.4
Off to the side of the cavern was a half-decayed, blue-green sea serpent. Scales that once glittered brightly now looked diminished. Old flesh lay across ivory-white bones. The worse part was the eyes. They stared blankly at the surface, never seeing.5
Wyn swam back to through the tunnel as fast as she could. Air met her lungs and she started to cry. Saya was dead. How had she died? The spell was suposed to put her in a deep sleep, not kill her!6
Wyn would have stayed there crying if she hadn't been so curius. Again she swam through the tunnel, but this time to the surface. She didn't stop to look at Saya. She knew she would start crying again if she did.7
The cavern was in the base of an over-hang cliff. It would take some time to climb. Though, if you went a little to the east, there was a steep bank that could be walked up easily. Taking this path, Wyn walked up to the old forest that lay beyond.8
The forest was made of oaks, maples, pines, and many others. Wyn followed a twisting trail that led to an ancient city. Some one in the city would be able to tell her how long ago it was.9
The city was mostly how she remembered, with apples, oranges, cherries, peaches, pears, and many others growing around it and grape and olive vines growing on the wooden houses. The only thing that was different was the inhabitants. No longer did elves live in the city. Humans tended there gardens and houses.10
Wyn stood in the trees, not daring to move. First Saya, now this? How did humans ever evan get into the city? Something is wrong, she dicided, terribly wrong....11
One human spotted her and was now staring at Wyn intensly. She ignored him and enterd the city. She bent her head, her dripping, brown hair covering her pointed ears, and hunched her back. She pulled her wet cloak tightly around herself protectively. Eyes down-cast and pretending to limp, she moved through the city with surprising speed. She didn't dare give up the act until she was about a mile away.12
Slowly, she straitened up and put her hair behind her ears. She stood there silently until she heard soft, impatient rustling in the trees behind her.13
"Who stalks a poor, old lady?" she asked, turning around to face the stranger.14
Author notes
Not done. Going to change description and background ect. Gtg!! Bi!!!
A contest entry
- elves rule! by Elvenfairy.
175 points, ended July 5, 2008, 8 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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not a bad start. It could make an interesting story if you ever expand on it. Thanks for entering my contest
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Ally, I love this story. The characterization and the writing style are great! ^^
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Oops!!!!! I can't spell to save my life!!!! Thanks!!!!!!!! The next chapter (if I ever get to write it) is goinng to have more about the spell. Thank you so much!!!!!!!!
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breath is spelt without an e. Curious is spelt like that. Decided.
This is interesting, and very intriguing, but far too short. If you wrote more than a few paragraphs, then I probably would accept it in my contest. But I like where this is going. I assume she fell into a deep sleep? You didn't recap about the spell that much, so that part is sort of fuzzy. All in all, if you keep writing, I'll keep reading.
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Thank you so much!!! I didn't write a second chapter yet, though. Hope keeps bugging me about No Plot!!! so I can't update anthing untill she's totally annoyed. Lol. fhfnc;jfpg hoyklOBFI NFOIYRE. Wow that is so fun!!!!!
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Wow a really good starter chapter I hope you will enter more into the contest I will look forward to reading it - if not I'll have to go look for it!
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Excellent
Truly wonderful. Such great descriptions. This was very stimulating to the senses. A great story. A marvelous chapter one! Good luck in the contest.
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AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ALLY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS TOTALLY GREAT!!!!! I swear you're going to be published by the time you're 16....I swear...
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