Caden [20]

"Eric,
this is the hill.
This is where I think.
This is where I really live."1

"It's nice Caden,
but I
don't understand
why I'm here."2

I
laid
down,
waited
for Eric to
do the same
and when he didn't
I told him too. The sun
had almost set, and the
stars were splattering above.3

"The
last time
I was here, Eric,
was when I decided
to kill myself. I remember
staring up, thinking of you and Kerry."4

"Well I'm glad you
didn't kill yourself,
but that does
not excuse the fact
that you have serious
fucking
mental problems,
and think you can make
out with my girlfriend."5

"I
didn't want
to make out with
her. It just happened."6

"But Caden,
everything
happens with you.
Everything
has always happened with you.
Things
need to change.
You
need to change.
This all
needs to change."7

"When
you change the
way you look at things,
the things you look at change."8

"What Caden?"9

"I was
just quoting Mullins.
He said that. Do you believe it?"10

"Well,
to be honest,
I always found the
stars were a little annoying.11

Tiny pickets
of light, which play
no significance in the
way in which we interact.12

However,
tonight, I don't
mind them at all."13

Do
you
see why
Eric would
be the perfect
guy, for anyone?14

"Girls
don't mean
anything to me
Caden. You know that.
Just please, change, for me.15

I am,
Eric, I will.16

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  • seasonsoflove
    October 14

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    Wow. So touching! Tears in my eyes. Great story you've created here, Kevan. Truly a beautiful work.

    If you ever decide to make a sequal, please let me know!! It's been a great read.


  • LivingContradiction
    October 9

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    Ok I've read it up to here. I was waiting till your last finished chapter to comment and all I have say is it's amazing your style reminds me of the style used in House of Leaves(don't remember the authors name) I like your characters and how they actually give you sense of realness, unlike most stories.
    I want to read more...please.


  • keepItLit9109
    September 8
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    You're not finishing, and it's making me want to cry :-(


  • Hloverofpeace
    August 10
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    another fantastic chapter.


  • Queen Mab gold member
    August 7

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    So sad. Eric is such a brilliant friend. And Caden, oh poor Caden.. I hope he isn't damaged beyond repair. Another fantastic chapter. I'm enjoying it so much.

    ~Mab

  • keepItLit9109
    August 6

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    Awh... :-)
    I'm glad their friendship isn't over, though it seems a tad unrealistic that the Eric would just be like "It's cool--just change and it's all good."
    But I'm still in love with this. Continue, continue!

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