A. was used to motion sickness. She had long become accustomed to a rapid heartbeat and a stomach twisted in fear and adrenaline. How she knew rollercoasters! The sudden drops, sharp twists, and curving loops! They had become expected and routine in their predictability. Sometimes she even felt them in her sleep. 1
Although it was quite obvious, A. didn't discuss this phenomenon with most people. She tried not to inflict her rollercoaster days on others, but that was not always possible. To her, it was a unique sort of depression (aren't they all?) An amazing day could be ruined by a misplaced thought, just as an everlasting afternoon could be brightened by an accidental observation. 2
No matter what she tried, A. could not control her emotions the way everyone else seemed to. Contentment twisted into bitterness. Hurt would temporarily swing into peace, but suddenly drop into fatigue. She shut herself away; the zig zags weren't so sharp in bed. 3
After a long period of rest things began to change. A. learned to keep busy and rely on her friends. It was not a magical transformation, but soon the rollercoasters became smaller, more manageable. 4
One day, A. opened her eyes to feel a steady pressure on her chest. Suddenly she was tilting forward and felt a rush of energy and dread. Screaming, she held his hand as the ride began. When it was over, they stuck with the swings.
Author notes
I hate rollercoasters. Physical and metaphorical.
Bonus points if you can guess the song that the title comes from.
What did you think? Please comment!
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truly a great piece of poetry.. written well words flowed well with your theme..motion sickness is not an easy pice to write about ..great job..Linda
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This is a beautiful poem that delves on the act of passinate love and desire to the reader .I love the imageries used in comparison to dizziness and spinning to expressly convey the feelings of the reader.Thank you for sharing with me on this site.
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this is a very good write that holds the readers attention throughout and makes them wanting more well done
love and light
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Just because you used a Dave line in your story/poem I would have given it applause but this is a great write. I feel like it was written about me. Although I don't think I have come fully out of my emotional rollercoaster. My rest hasn't been all that great lately which makes it worse. My moods and feelings are all haywire. Do you think menopause is possible at 25? It would certainly explain a lot. My friends... bless them... put up with me when I'm being completly unresonable. Like this morning for example. Anyways good stuff here.
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::pulling my stomach out of the air above::
Oh, this is interesting! I like how you call the main character A. - very simple and nice. I'm sorry you didn't make it to the contest, but I'm really glad you posted this anyway. There were some extenuating circumstances and Glyph and I had to terminate the contest early (the deadline you'd been shooting for was correct).
As I was reading this, I could actually feel the roller-coaster sensation. I'm not a huge fan of roller coasters myself... the closest I've ever come is those water/flume rides. As for the emotional roller coasters - I HATE those! I'm in the process of becoming a more stable person with the help of God and somebody very special who loves me. It's amazing and God is so good!
Thank you for writing! As always, I continue to be a follower of your writings. Please keep up the good work... and avoid the roller coasters.
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I like this alot. I read it a couple times! LOL I was there with you..nice nice nice work!
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Ding ding...you guessed correctly about the title. It's "So Damn Lucky" from Some Devil.
Thank you for the lovely comments. They mean a lot to me.
Yes, you're also right about the initials. You know me too well.
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--Is it from a dave mattews band song? (i'm not good with the titles of most of their songs)
--Anywho, this was sublimely intelligent writing! Such statements about how reacting to different moments in life change our views of them. Everything brilliantly kept in perspective and explicitly stricken into full-blooming metaphors. The phrase you ended on is particualrly stunning and I'm totally envious of the whole idea and the feelings it emits (the brisk yet peaceful serenity of swinging side by side with the one you love to just exist and relax and converse about the universe until the sun goes down just to converse some more about everything else). Is your name being initialized for the "A."s or is there something else about it that I might be missing? Well I loved this prose-y little dose of reality. You nailed it! 
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