Hearts a la Mode

"Come on!" Kris complained. "I haven't seen you in two months!"
"The happiest of my life," Cami responded in a dull voice, flipping her almond-brown hair and walking away.
"Listen," Kris ran to stop her. She stop and looked at him reluctantly. "Hilary bought a whole MALL! And our class gets to have a party. Plus it's a shopping spree."
"Exactly," Chloe said, walking up to Cami's side. "And we need to find some clothes!"
Chloe walked away with Cami. They were attempting to decide which store to go to first. Kris sighed and walked away.1

3 hours later...2

"Hey, Cami?" Kris asked. "You wanna get some ice cream?"
"Sure," Cami said. "I had my frappuccino one hour ago, so I'm in desperate need of a frozen treat."
They both laughed. They walked into Pink-berry. Cami ordered every flavor with white chocolate shavings. Kris got original with strawberries.
"A toast!" Kris said, raising his cup.
"Ching," Cami said as their cups touched.
"Let's go to the zen," Kris said. This was the garden in the mall where no one ever goes. It was a beautiful green maze, and no one could ever find it. Except for Cami's friends.3

In the zen garden...4

"So, who do you like?" Cami asked. This was a conversation they had often. Usually Kris' crushes ranged from constantly changing to constantly Cami.
"You," Kris said plainly.
"No, I mean like-like," Cami said, when she finished swallowing her spoonful of ice cream. She took out some mints and ate one.
"Mint?" she held out the box.
"Sure," Kris said, taking a mint.
"So, who do you like-like?"
"You," he said in the same calm tone.
"Come on," Cami insisted. "Tell me!"
"You," he said, leaning in.
They kissed.

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  • musical tai
    August 22

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    think it shouldve built upto the part where they kissed, cause it was kinda outta the blue like you were just putting pieces of a story together and not really transitioning them.

    other than that, great job! very cute, keep writting! =D

  • leolord5235
    August 16
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    aw it just kind of happened, but it was still kinda sweet


  • yin20yang
    August 7
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    My opinion of this remains the same as when I first read it...it needs more detail, but it is a very interesting story. Good job.


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    August 7
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    i thought this was so awesome and cute. It is deffo a finalist!


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    August 7
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    awww i loved the ending! thats soo cute!!!!!!!!!


  • codename
    August 6
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    aww that was sooo cute. you!!! ahhaha i love the end great work. i love this story it was adorable!!

    beginning: 3, ending: 4, characters: 5.


  • Whipper Snapper silver member
    August 6
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    Oh my gosh! This is cool. I like it. I love romantic stuff like that.

    Good job and good luck!


  • Miss Recondite
    August 5

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    I like it. Very interesting indeed. If you added more detail, I would have loved it. Keep writing, and I'm sure people will give you comments to fuel your pashion for writing.


  • neutraltint
    August 3
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    i like this! nice story!

  • yin20yang
    August 3

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    Whoa...this is a bit confusing...is this a screen write? because if not, it should contain a tad more detail... I love the whole idea tho!! Good job.

  • Matthew-U
    August 3
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    Oooh

    Very romantic, i love how forward Kris is by just saying 'you' haha. Brilliant, i hope you write more of this.

    x

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