Corky Hedgehog, The Moogle and The Owl

The old, mouldy leaves looked a very good place to find a tasty meal thought Corky Hedgehog as he shuffled his way toward the middle of the little wood. His little legs moved faster than ever as he began to run, huffing and puffing as he scurried forward. 1

He reached the little mound of leaves and pushed his shiny, wet nose right into the middle of the pile. 2

Nothing happened, not a stir ... Corky moved the brown leaves to the side with his front, right foot, still nothing! 'Well, I never, all that hurry and scurry for nothing' Corky gave a sigh and went to turn away very, very disappointed. 3

All of a sudden, there was movement amongst the pile of leaves. Corky stood very still, his shiny, wet nose twitching in the air, thinking he must have imagined it, he turned and began to walk away.4

'Hello there, you woke me up' said a drowsy voice coming from the middle of the old, mouldy pile of leaves. 'I hope you are not going to leave me without saying hello, are you?"5

'I was looking for something to eat' said Corky Hedgehog, as he looked in surprise at a very scruffy Moogle (a Moogle is a small, furry animal that looks very much like a rabbit with small ears and very, very large, round, brown eyes) 'I have not eaten for two days, I am so hungry,' said Corky Hedgehog,  'I thought this pile of leaves would be sure to have some tasty morsel to eat hidden in the middle.'6

'You won't find anything here' said the Moogle, "I ate the last of the acorns the Squirrel hid here for the winter well before I had finished the last of my own food, now, since you have woken me early from my sleep, I shall come with you and together, perhaps we shall be able to find something we can share, I too, am very hungry, my tummy is rumbling like a steam train going along old, rickety rail tracks.'7

Corky gave this much thought, 'that's not a bad idea' said Corky, thinking that two heads are better than one when trying to find a meal that would be good enough to eat.8

So off they went together, Corky the Hedgehog and the Moogle (he didn't have a name, he was just a Moogle) they left the mouldy pile of leaves in the middle of the wood and ambled down the narrow path toward the little well at the far end.9

As they came to the old stone wall of the ivy covered well, they could hear a faint voice, at least the Moogle said he could hear it!10

'Helpppppppppp meeeeeee' said a distant voice.11

'What on earth is that?' said Corky Hedgehog in surprise. 12

'Get me out of here please' said a squeeky voice.13

The Moogle stood up close to the well and looked over the side. 'Oh my goodness' said the Moogle, "how on earth did you come to be down there, and what is that you have with you.?"14

The squeeky voice answered, 'I was on my way to a party on the other side of the wood when I saw this well, I was so very thirsty so thought it would be a good idea to have a nice long, cool drink of well water'15

Corky's ears pricked up at once, 'You were going to a party?" said Corky, his face smiling from ear to ear in the biggest grin the Moogle had ever seen.16

'Yes, that's what I said, if I can get out of here before dark that is' said the squeeky voice way down at the bottom of the well.17

'Hang on, we will pull you out' said the Moogle giving Corkey an impatient look. 'Come on Corky, you get behind me and we can pull together."18

So the Moogle and Corky pulled hard on the rope that was hanging down the well and before you could say 'Jack Robinson' there appeared over the side of the well, a wet, tired looking owl.19

'Why didn't you fly out?' said Corky, "Owls can fly can't they?"20

'Of course we can said the Owl, but as I fell in the well, I landed right at the bottom in the water, and EVERYONE KNOWS that Owls can't fly with wet wings!'21

Of course by this time, all corky could think about was the party the Owl had said he was going to, that would mean food and after all, he and the Moogle had saved the Owl from a terrible fate down the well, so he would be sure to ask them to go along to the party with him.22

Sure enough, as he shook his wet, bedraggled feathers to dry them, showering everything around him with cool well water, he asked Corky and the Moogle if they would like to go to the party with him.23

'Oh yes please' said Corky, 'We are both very hungry, we haven't eaten for a couple of days, and a party would be wonderful, wouldn't it?' he said looking sideways at the Moogle.24

'Yes, it would," said the Moogle licking his lips, his mouth watering at the thought of being able to share what the Owl had in the little basket he was carrying to the party.25

So, off they went, the Hedgehog, the Moogle and the Owl.26

They had a wonderful time together at the party, meeting others animals who lived in the little wood too. They all went home smiling, very tired and determined they would make sure they had enough food stored away for another winter so they wouldn't ever be hungry again.
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~Katie~ 28

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Author notes

This is my first attempt at anything like this, I have decided to try and write a Children's Short Story. I hope this is ok.

I have read and commented on: To Sleep Perchance To Dream by
                             Chuck Johnson.

                             The Handling Of Love by
                             DevonJM

                             Lily by
                             AerinAlanna

                             Clown's Feet by
                             Hey Kid Want A Nut

                             And others.

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  • wishintreeUK
    September 26, 2005
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    Thank you for reading my childrens story marmalade, I am pleased you enjoyed it!

    ~Katie~


  • marmalade
    September 26, 2005
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    a very charming tale

    a beautifull story could almost see the pictures forming before my eyes.

  • wishintreeUK
    September 22, 2005
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    Munda, I am pleased you found enjoyment reading my short story, I shall write more adventures around these characters. Thank you for leaving your upbuilding comments.

    ~Katie~

  • Munda
    September 21, 2005
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    This was such a wonderful story. You could easily make this the adventures of Corky Hedgehok and his friend Moogle. For example the part they went to could be a story by itself and I'm sure you can think of lots of other adventures. I really love your style of writing and am looking forward to more of your tales.

  • wishintreeUK
    September 16, 2005
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    Thank you so very much for your comments on my short story, I do intend to write more adventures concerning these particular characters, as I was writing, I could feel myself wanting to write more and more, however, a short story is just that... a short story and I didn't want to go over the word limit. I honestly did enjoy doing this. Thank you for your encouragement, I do so appreciate it.

    ~Katie~

  • wishintreeUK
    September 16, 2005
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    Thank you so much tieed for reading my short story, I am honoured you found it worthy of comment and I do appreciate that.

    ~Katie~


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    September 13, 2005
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    This was just wonderful and almost reminiscent of tales by the riverbank. Nothing pleases or delights children more than animals taking on human characteristics with a mix of there own traits. I really hope that one day you expand the story and take the reader to the party let us meet some of the other wildlife that has gathered and follow the adventure. If I was to recommend anything to you it would be to just let your imagination take you were it wants to go and have fun along the way. And perhaps right justify for stories makes it a little easer to read. All the best look forward to reading more sort story from you…
    Paul

  • Touchof1der
    September 12, 2005
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    I don't know about this just being a children's story, as I too found great pleasure in reading this. I love the fact that you used animals and you have also infused a valuable lesson here for children and adults... and animals too, alike. It's important that we plan ahead for lean times and no become lazy. This is a wonderful story and I agree with Sammy, you should try your hand at it more often. Thank you for entering our contest and good luck!
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    ~~~Touchof1der~~~
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  • tieed
    September 12, 2005
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    Very sweet. Not only did you write it with realism good enough for an adult's book, but you created a small world with cute characters suitable for children. I only have one 'complaint' and that isn't even with the story itself, i just found the 'center' format to be a bit distracting...still good job!!

  • wishintreeUK
    September 11, 2005
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    Thank you DevonJM I am pleased you enjoyed my Children's story.
    I appreciate your comment.

    ~Katie~


  • DevonJM
    September 11, 2005
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    Excellent!

    I love it! I wish I could illustrate it, I can see it! Thats gotta be fun, I have never tried a story like that. Very very cool

  • wishintreeUK
    September 11, 2005
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    Bless you Sammy for your wonderful encouragement, I truly did enjoy writng this.

    ~Kate~

  • Dreamweaver
    September 10, 2005
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    EXCELLENT

    Oh my dear Katie!
    You are on to a winner here! What a delightful story you have told. I know that my grandkids will love to hear me read them this. You have done a superb job.
    You should be writing more such stories, especially with your love for nature.
    Good luck with the contest.


    Sammy

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