Lucky Clover

It was a sunndy day at 21 Tropic Street, and Harry was playing basketball with 3 of his friends, Raymond, Thomas and Joshua. Harry wasn't having any fun, or luck because he never got a goal. It was Harry + Thomas verses Raymond + Joshua. With the score of 4 - 32, Harry already gave up. "I'll NEVER score a goal!" he cried. "I'm no use!"1

"Don't give up Harry! You just COULDN'T give up that easily!" Thosmas comforted. But that didn't comfort Harry. He kept on weeping. As Harry walked home, he noticed a small clover patch. He hurried to examine them and found that all the clovers had only 3 leaves except..."Oh my gosh! It's a four leaved clover! It must have been the first one I've ever SEEN one!" he gasped. With that, he quickly pulled it out and put it carefully in his pocket. That night, his parents had cooked him his favourites for dinner!2

The next day, Harry went out to play basketball again. He had his four leaved clover in his pocket. Harry played hard and fair, and he scored 27 goals along with Thomas scoring 12! It was 37 - 17 and at the end of the game, Harry's friends asked, "how could you score so many goals today and couldn't even score yesterday?" 3

"I was tired," Harry secretly replied untruthly. He kept the clover in a special container and he only used it on special occasions!

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  • keroppi33
    August 22

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    just remember you spelled the word sunny 'sunndy' and you need to capitalize the word 'how' in paragraph 3. also i think you mean to say 'untruthfully' in the last paragraph instead of 'untruthly' other than those couple mistakes, its a cute little story. i like it!

  • Ammal
    August 3
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    amazing i added u as favourite

  • Little Lesley
    August 3
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    Oh, Thanks SageSyren for relising my incorrect spelling, I should fix them...but anyway thanks for commenting!


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    August 3

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    P1 sunndy/sunny
    21/twenty-one
    3/three
    +/plus

    P2 leaved/leaf

    P3 leaved/leaf
    27/twenty-seven
    12/twelve
    37/thirty-seven
    17/seventeen
    '...asked, "(H)ow could...'


    A very good write. Just watch your SPaG.

    Brooke