She looked up at the sky and what she saw took her breath away. The blue seemed to melt with pink and suddenly she felt so small underneath that huge sky with trees towering over her. Music replayed over in her head while the words swept her away.1
Her head was pounding, her legs were aching still she trudged on. She wanted to run like the wind, forget everything and everyone. She needed to escape into her world even if only for a few moments. She closed her eyes and felt like she was soaring over the suppressing trees and into the darkening sky.2
“Right Ally?” Ali was forced back to reality by Shelly, her best friend.3
"Yeah sure" She didn't feel like talking but she knew it was pretty much impossible to shut Shelly up. She loved her to death but right now she needed to be alone, lost in her world.4
Author notes
Ok well i finally figured out where im going with this butt its gunna take awhile for the beggining...andd this part needs to be changed
What did you think? Please comment!
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I like this. It's short and it explains that sometimes people just need that little get away moment. SOmetimes they take years sometimes on a few secounds. BUt clearly this person needed more than she had gotten. Sorry i probably just ruined your story. Great job bay.
Fee
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This is a great story,but the line "Her head was pounding, her legs were aching still she trudged on." makes me think that she was raped or abused.Can you explain that line to me?
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sorry it has taken me sooooooo long to comment you back. Thank you for writing a very well thought out comment to my "15 tears" I need the constructive critism. Thanks for the help! this story has a wonderful meaning! very nice job. very descriptive with lots of emotion! very good write! How do you put a story on here. i tried and it still came up as a poem. i was so confused! please help if you have some time! thanks
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