Captured Bride

He was a great warrior chief and I was his captured bride, heavy with his child. He stole me from my people against my wishes. Each night I cringed as he touched me with his savage hands in the most intimate of places. After time passed, I stopped fighting him and learned to enjoy it. 1

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I wrote this for a contest 55 words but it ended before I could submit my work.

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  • Diamond
    September 8, 2005
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    My only regret was being too late to enter the contest. Thank you for your comments Legend, it's really not that easy writing a 55 word story but it is challenging. Avril

  • Diamond
    September 8, 2005
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    Why thank you so much Poetry my friend, I may have to elaborate on this sory someday, I know what it's like being a kid in a candy store lol. Avril


  • Legend silver member
    September 8, 2005
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    Avril how on earth can anyone write a story with 55 words, I have no idea, but clearly you have, OK so i have to fill in the spaces, but then again that is something that readers do anyway .Well done


  • poetry within
    September 8, 2005
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    although I'm not a romance novel person mysel;f,I could see this one being a great one. I think it is a beautiful start to a great story. please think about adding more to this one.
    i'M LIKE A KID IN A CANDY STORY WHEN i GET TO READ ONE OF YOUR STORIES OR COLLECTIONS!! THEY MAKE MY DAY AVRIL.
    lots of love and best wishes as always my dear,dear friend


  • queen gold member
    September 8, 2005
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    Sounds like the beginning of a great story. I am guilty i read romance novels like this all the time

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