Stars shining brightly,
Up in the midnight sky,
Lying below on the soft green grass,
I just cant help but wonder why....1
Why the stars are so far away,
And just come out at night,
Yet at the time our favourite star,
Has travelled out of sight.2
Our star comes out at day,
And lights up all the earth,
Sunshine bright upon our feet,
Forever from my birth.
A contest entry
- Poems about Stars by ZackTruel.
175 points, ended July 27, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nicely written, i like the rhyme scheme and the fact that you used the sun as your star unlike many others who would have ignored the fact that the closest most important star to us is in fact the sun.
"Sunshine bright upon our feet, Forever from my birth" is my favorite line your words flow so beautifully together.
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Whoa, I love it. You have such a talent to write good poetry. Its so true, like stars will only come out at night, it means there us always hope in the darkness. Very nice piece. You deserve the gold!
Great job!
Denis -
You have quite a skill for rhyme and rhythm with this piece, and the light-heartedness in it is just delightful. I have been seeing a lot of depressing songs/poems recently, so seeing this bright one really brightens my day!
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So cute!
I like the fact that you recognised the sun as a star and not a planet. That's a common misconception that ticks me off...
The kind of poem that makes you say "aww..."
hehehe
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Very good poem, this is the kind of stuff that I was looking for. Excellent rhyme and rythme, and good theme. Good luck.
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