Eternal Slumber1
Sans hurt, sans death, sans hunger2
Dreams never come true3
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You open your heart5
Teach me things I never knew6
But I never learn...7
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Round and round she goes9
Trying to figure out End10
Poor girl displays time.11
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Right, left, looks the mouse13
Hard to choose; Cat or Cheese- But14
Life always comes first...15
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Reincarnation,17
Judgment day, Heaven and Hell..18
Humbug! Just live life...19
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Too precious to lose21
stored my innocence safely22
My childhood photo23
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Day, work, day, work, day...25
Life trudges on and on, while26
Nights long to be slept...27
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Staring from the purse29
The last rupee reminds me...30
How much I miss Dad!31
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As the last rain drop33
Hits the earth, I start waiting;34
For the next first drop...35
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Author notes
My first attempt at haiku, and I being a lazy sloth, this small form of poetry attracts me and suits me well... I had actually written some of them during the Haiku contest was still alive and kicking, but didn't get a chance to post them. So, finally, I post some of my haikus here.
I've followed the format, so tell me if they are worth the formatting...
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Some of these are pretty good. My favorites were the first one and the rain drop one. Good job.
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Thanks Isabella! Glad you liked them
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I worked in a call centre for many years. I work nightshift manual jobs now. The kinder people work by night.
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Really impressed
The beauty of the haiku is that you have to condense everything. When done well it can turn every line into a nugget of gold. You have achieved that here, and produced some excellent stuff. My favourite (for what it's worth) was the lovely little nuggett about the day/work.
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Thanks Rorshach! Thanks for making me feel humble
Well, your liking the day/work haiku makes me wonder; are you in the IT field? *lol*
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These were all well done! I liked them all but my favorites are 'Eternal Slumber", "Reincarnation", Too precious to lose", and "Staring from the purse"!
Let's read some more!
Anaya Roma
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Thanks for the motivation Anaya! Let me shower you with more haikus and make you wonder why you ever asked for them
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I thought you did a great job. I enjoyed every one of them.
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Thanks dude! Glad you enjoyed them
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Well done and very unique. Each show a little different side of you. As luv said you can see a story behind each one, very vivid.
Nice job, keep 'em coming.
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Thanks Toni! Glad you could see the bigger picture behind them *Don't take credit for it, you @#@%@#! You never intended any of those
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I still have some haiku's at home in my laptop. But my laziness has still made me 'net'less, and hence my laptop is as connected to the world as a blue elephant to pink feathers
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It's pleasure to see you writing
ouch..sorry kidding Beautiful work Mani, really all these are small gems. I found story behind every haiku and which is making them spacial for me. not sure you wrote them in this fashion or it is my sappy heart...but i love them all espacially the one about money and dad...
Good job Mani keep writing.
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Hey lav! Thanks for liking it! Actually, I wrote most of these during my office hours (now that's supposed to be within us two.. don't ever leak it outside) with some help from my colleague. I would ask her for a random word, and let my thoughts flow and construct a haiku from it.. But mostly, they came from within my heart.. Hopefully, I'll post more of them, for they're easy to write
Thanks for inspiring me!
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