Precious Gems

I see the stars1

Like scars2

Cutting the sky deep3

Gleaming whilst I sleep4

Twining through the sky like a vine5

Oh so very divine6

I wish I could hold them7

Have it like a gem8

And let everyone see. . 9

My precious star10

Shining from a far11

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  • ZackTruel
    July 23

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    Not bad at all. The rhyme scheme was a little different that most, but there was nothing wrong with it at all. It worked great. Great rhyme, and even though the rhythm seemed a little awkward it wasn't bad.

    Good luck in the contest.