Yellow.


Canola is yellow1

So are trees2

Flowers are yellow3

And so are bees4

Cars and trains5

Boats and planes6

Some fruits are yellow7

Like lemons8

And pears9

Some objects are yellow10

Like pillows 11

Or chairs12

Lights13

Lamps14

Houses15

And stores16

Yellow.17

So soothing.18

So warm19

So bright20

Yellow 21

So beautiful 22

So wonderful23

So right.24


Yellow....

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  • Smexi-gurl
    July 23

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    I agree with Goddess of Evil, you should have put "yellow" at the end one last time. It woul have tied it all together. But all in all it was pretty good!

  • Marta gold member
    July 23
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    This reads great, almost like a Dr.Seuss book.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


  • An Empty World
    July 22
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    I love it.

    You should've said "yellow" one more time for the last line! It was set up so perfectly, YELLOW!