Oh no1
Where did he go?2
He just couldn't stay3
Tomorrow is his birthday4
"He was abducted" says she5
Well shucks, he'll miss his surprise party6
But just before we cancelled everything7
From outer space came something8
They said we'll bring him back9
As long as us you don't attack10
So he made it here for his birthday party11
And the aliens joined us and celebrated joyfully12
Author notes
Hey!!! Happy birthday (former uncle) Jay!!! LOL
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"well, that was just wierd"...."never seen anything wierder"...."incredibly wierd"...."oh, and if you didn't know, I'm just doing this for points lolololololololol".....well, gotta go, meep meep lol
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Wow, Brad Pitt read your story!!!
I think if we look closely the Aliens may have turned Jay into the birthday cake! I know aliens and they never do something nice without doing something evil first!
Yes I'm crazy...
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Really cute poem and I agree, the picture is awsome, good job and keept it up.
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Thank you for the lovely comment... Don't worry, my picture adding runs out on Sept 6 so I will know how you feel... I also went about 8 months before getting a silver membership...
Beth
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VERY GOOD I LIKE IT A LOT
i also like this it is very good. i wish i could put pictures on my poems. they are very cute. 
see me fly is right the picture does go great with this story.you kno what i will throw out some roses also. 
oh and as see me fly said dont let these die please i had a very hard time growing them.lol. well anyway you are very good at writing even though i think this is the first poem/story i have read by you but oh well. you seem good.i will have to add you to my favorites list if you dont mind.oh and i also think you didnt try to force the rhyming it seemed just right. 
i will rea mor poems/storys by you later but now i have to go. buhbye.
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very good
cute i like it. nice picture it goes really well with this story. i will throw roses out to you. here you go. i hope you like them oh and dont let them die. well back to the story. i am also glad that they brought him back.the ending is also very cute. it didnt seem that you tryed to force the rhyiming i like that.well i have to go.bye.
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Good one. These entries are cute and funny! Love the ending
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lol...wow. I like it, it's cute. I like the picture too!
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LOL Well, I'm glad they brought him back, but I understand he's now off to Canada. We'll see if he can stand up when he gets back.
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In the thing I'm working on, they don't bring him back and Roofus...well let's just say that the probing device is still missing.
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