Wow,1
Yuk,2
She's the most beautiful thing I've ever seen!3
What an ugly mess of a woman!4
Those grey eyes, like a dusk sky,5
Those dull eyes, like someone has sucked the life out of them,6
Rounded body, a goddess!7
Fat as a plump Christmas goose!8
A graceful glide of an eagal...9
Ha-ha! She just stumbled!10
I want to give her the world...11
I want to give her a mirror.12
I'm going to talk to her.13
I want to tell her about her face!14
No your not!15
Try and stop me!16
Please...no...stop...17
Oh! What a little child!18
No...19
You've been like this since the day I met you, weak!20
This is the last straw!21
What are you going to do? You can't do anything! Your worthless, coward!22
I'm warning you!23
Always, "I don't want to!" Never, "Yes! Let's!"24
Stop, NOW.25
I won't, you don't have the courage, or the brains!26
Yes I do!27
No you don't! You alw-PUT DOWN THAT GUN.28
Never! You've always treated me poorly, calling me bad things and hurting me! I can't take it anymore! I want this torment to end, I want you to die, and then role over in your grave! I hate you! You've ruined my life and I need not see you anymore!29
No! Please! I'll be your soulmate! You can alw-30
!!!!!!!!!!!BAM!!!!!!!!!!!31
Author notes
I wrote this for a compitition on split personalities. I'm sorry this is so dark, but I feel angry right now.
What did you think? Please comment!
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We said this out loud, one was the good and one was the bad. We ended up screaming at each other in the end...Bam was pretty intense. Had one screaming "AHHHHHHHHH" while the other "BAM!". Was just really intense while the other was not. Right now we can't really type..because the backspace keeps on deleting the whole thing. So...we'll leave. Good job...bye bye.
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This is AWESOME!!! i love it. sounds like something I would do. Not in real life, but you know... I hope. Anyways! Great write!
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LOVE IT!!!
man you're an awsome writer... i like how i can relate to your writing so much! it remineds me of my 8th grade year... brings back alot of memories of sad and lonely times...
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what corinne said, it seems like you have a really deep inner conflict, its really good.
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wow, this poem is really sad, i love it. i want to cry just reading it. it seems like you have a really deep inner conflict. your writeing is wonderful because it is to the point. you dont cover it up with metaphores or anything. ots beautiful. cheer up, you writing is a gift. dotn deny the world what you have the power to give. never give up
love corinne
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