“Thank you for letting me sleep here again.”1
“It’s fine Mary. Do you need anything else?” Aldin said sitting on the edge of his bed where Mary sat with her small arms around her legs in a thin peach nightgown. 2
“No, I am fine, thank you.” Aldin watched her lips spread across her delicate face into a large smile as she stared up at him with large hazel eyes. He loved how bright and wide they were and how just a little bit of red went around the tips of her irises like a ribbon. His eyes moved gently down to her lips lush pink lips, then over them like the golden hills he had traveled with her in his arms. She had been so small and weak then, now she was much stronger and confident. She had grown since then, she wasn’t the tiny little girl he had brought to live with his kind in safety of the mountains that surrounded their home. But she was still so young, still so tender and innocent. And so soft. His eyes jumped from her lips to her eyes within seconds so his mind wouldn’t stray farther.3
“I’m just in the next room, so if you need me just whisper and I’ll be here for you.” He said quietly in the moonlit room. Mary had been afraid to sleep in the other room, there were no windows so no light made it in the four walls. She hated the dark. But all Aldin could think about was how the moon hit her pale skin, stunning eyes, and divine lips while it flooded into his room. “You are so beautiful.” He whispered as the moon made the red in her eyes glitter and her lips skin glow.4
“Thank you.” Her tinkling laugh resonated inside his ears as her eyes crinkled and her lips softly parted.5
“Mary?”6
“Yes?” she smiled trying not to show how happy his simple complement had made her. But he could see how her cheeks had flushed just slightly; it just made her more beautiful.7
“I,” he paused. He didn’t know what to say as he was caught in her eyes. He usually knew exactly what to do but not with her. He let his eyes move down to her lips again and soon they were running over the soft landscape just wishing he could feel how supple they were. Or to feel her skin which was only comparable to a ripe peach in its caress. “I can’t do this anymore.”8
“Aldin?” Mary tried to keep her eyes focused on his steal blue eyes as he leaned towards her and softly kissed her. “What are you doing?” she said as his lips hovered so close that hers gently brushed against his when she spoke. And still he didn’t move; he couldn’t.9
He brought his hand up so that his long fingers rested on the back of her neck and his thumb caressed the edge of her jaw. He slowly moved back to her lips and pressed tenderly against them as she stayed completely still. He stopped putting pressure on her lips and just let his relax against the silky new terrain.10
“Aldin?” She whispered with her lips moving against his.11
“I can’t just ignore you anymore.” He said kissing her more fervently now. “I can’t do it anymore.” He leaned farther towards her so that his other hand pressed into the bed next to her petite body. He leaned over her body kissing her with his lips drawn to hers as his passion grew in intensity.12
Mary didn’t move as his hands moved off the bed and onto her hips, she didn’t know how to react. No one had ever touched her like this, no one had ever kissed her, or been so intimate and close. She wasn’t even sure what he was doing as he leaned so far that her back rested against the bed and his weight rested solely on her body.13
He slipped his hands just under her waist and felt the heat from her skin emanating out of the thin fabric covering her delicate skin. He moved his hand from her neck down her arm as his lips found the new environment of her heated cheeks just as satisfying as her moist lips. He felt her hand against his chest but didn’t feel any pressure pushing against him just her slight grip as her fingers grasped at his skin.14
“If you want me to stop, I will.” He mumbled kissing her neck so that he could feel her rising heart beat. He moved his hands even farther down, letting them slip over her outline until they found the exposed skin of her lower thigh. With his hand behind her back he started to go move from under her until it was buried deeply within her long red hair. “Do you want me stop?” he whispered as his lips moved against her throat.15
“No.” he heard her small voice finally break the silence that had been thrumming inside his head. “No.” she said with a little more confidence.16
He kissed her avidly wrapping one of his arms around her waist and the other gently rested in her thin hair. He felt his self become even more immersed in her every word, every movement, every smile, every sigh and every breath; though he knew how wrong it was. 17
His hand went back down to her thighs but this time they slowly came up pulling the gauzy lace tips of her nightgown. His long finger nails ran smoothly over her skin giving her feverish body chills while his lips moved down to her collar bone and on to her chest. 18
“Just relax, it will only hurt for a second. Just relax, you know I would never hurt you Mary.”19
“Unhun.” He brushed his hand against her thighs but her hand was still grasping his chest, her legs were still clenched together and her eyes were still wide with fear as he felt her body tremble under his weight. He moved his hand from her hair and gradually let it reach her other hand.20
“Just relax.” He whispered by her ear as he started kissing her neck again. He gripped her fingers and held on tightly to her bare waste as he became even more infatuated with the feel of her frame under him and the slight pressure her hand was causing on his chest, still she was shaking as he kissed her. He sighed wishing she could feel how his stomach twisted whenever he touched her or how heated his veins were with his lips against her skin.21
“Trust me.” Aldin said moving his hands over her trying to feel as much as he could.22
“I do.”23
He picked her up slightly and pulled her up farther on the bed as he kissed her stomach, just letting his lips linger on her skin long enough to smell the faint scent of her flowered wash and taste the raw passion of her body as responded to his touch. He smiled and moved a little farther down. Her reaction to his lips on her thighs was even more noticeable as she inhaled suddenly and her grip became tighter.24
Aldin followed a path with his lips up her inner thighs and soon her muscles relaxed, even before he reached the silken underwear she wore. He went back to kissing her stomach as his hands went around each of her thighs opening them just enough so that he could feel their embrace on his hips as he lowered his self back onto her.25
“I don’t know what you want.” She whispered with a shaky voice as he kissed the edge of her lips.26
“You. I’ve always wanted you.” He smiled allowing his fingers to caress the strips of fabric that hid her from him and the laces that kept fabric together. He guided her legs around him so that they hugged his waist tightly then raised her up on his hips while still letting his lips explore her neck and lips. He felt her put her arms around his neck, hesitantly, and kiss his neck as he undid the tie to her night gown. He pulled it off to see a braw with a bow in the middle that matched her panties. 27
He threw the gown off the side of the bed and started kissing her chest just above the flimsy braw. He pulled her closer to him then laid back on the bed, moving his lips over her body feverishly. He pulled off his pants quickly then laid back on top of her. He heard her gasp a little but his lips were soon back on hers with his tong dancing together with hers as his body moved over her in time with his pulse. He slipped his hand under her back and unhooked the braw then his lips were on her soft nipples as he lifted her up and took off the panties as well.28
“Breath, Mary.” He whispered. She sucked in breath remembering how he had said to relax. She trusted him so she breathed in as she felt him move push inside of her. She let out a small whimper as he pushed deeper. She grabbed on to his arms letting her sharps nails penetrate his skin.29
“Uhh.” He moaned and kissed her as he moved in and out. His heart pounded aggressively with the smell of his blood dripping off his arms onto the Mary’s pale skin. He put more pressure into each push as his body became more alight with lust. He groaned again and forced his self deeper as he viciously fiercely pressed Mary’s arms down into the bed. Her fingers were ripped from his arms and she jumped as he violently grabbed her hands and pushed ever deeper inside of her. 30
She sucked in her breath as she felt him rigidly pushing against her harder and harder each time. He took her hands and pulled them up to the pillow her head was resting on and firmly held them there while he thrust his self deeper. She couldn’t help let a few tears fall out of her eyes with each burning stroke and his claws piercing the fine skin on the back of her had.31
He leaned over and kissed by her pulse as he tried to become even more a part of her being.32
“Ahh.” She whimpered as she felt his teeth dig deeply into her neck. His hips gained fury as he pushed with more pressure each time. The smell of their blood in the room made him even more intoxicated in the moment roughly thrusting his mind deeper and deeper past the point of control.33
Aldin kissed her neck and licked the blood pooling by her fresh wounds. He pushed harder, growling at the base of his throat while he sucked in the smell of her blood. He groaned and forcing his self to pull from her.34
He rolled over onto the bed and breathed in deeply.35
“I didn’t mean to get so carried away.” He said as he breathed in rigidly. He laid there panting and breathing in the sweet aroma of their blood, his body shivered with pleasure and longing for more. He wanted more of everything, more of her, more of her blood, just another kiss or caress. He groaned loudly trying not to act on his wishes.36
“Oh god.” He breathed in and laughed. He felt more alive than he ever had as his heart still raced and the taste of her passion, her skin, and her blood still lingered on his lips. He sighed as his body trembled again.37
He let his tong go over his teethe tasting her again. His body shook with lust again. He laid there trying to get control of his self with his legs resting strait and his arms unmoving next to his body, except for the brief seconds he thought he couldn’t handle it when his hands would clench together and his body would shudder. He sighed and smiled, feeling strength and lust flowing through his veins.38
“Aldin?” he heard Mary’s small voice whimper.39
“Yes.” He looked over at her, hearing how small and scared her voice was. “You’re crying.” He said worried as he saw tears fall from her cheeks.40
“I’m fine.” She mumbled as his hand shot out to wipe them away.41
“What have I done to you?”42
Author notes
There vampires
he's not just crazy.
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Comments
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i liked this alot but you used alot of the same words to many times in the same paragraph;; sometimes when you say lips you could have said mouth with an adjective. i especialy liked the end when he sounded scared of his self and hurt by the sight of her tears.

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I think you're right, lips just sounds sexier than mouth most of the time. lol
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haha im glad my advice came to good use
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ok well i read this in one of the previous contests and before you freak out at me let me just say that it was a story worth reading the second time. So i read it over again and i liked it even more beacuse i finally understood what aldin was and everything it shows hurts love passion and a whole mix of emotion which is why i liked this story good job and especialy good luck in the contest oh yeah you get three claps for the briliant job you did.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thanks
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The beginning was a little confusing to me. It said that Aldin was sitting on his bed with Mary there with him then he says that hes just going to be in the other room. This didnt really make cents until I realized that Aldin was a vampire. It just seemed odd to me that Mary was sleeping in his bed and that he was going to be in the other room.
The other thing that I found a little off was that it said that the room was lit up by the moon then it said something about how Mary was afraid of the dark. Again this didnt make any cents until its apperant that Aldin is a vampire. Maybe you should mention that hes a vampire sooner or hint that he is more offten.
Other than the beginning, I liked how you described how Mary looked to him and what he did with her. It was more like watching a movie other than reading about it. Nice job! -
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Thanks for the advice
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Loved it! I love the detail you used, and how his soft gentle caresses turned into something more animal based, the breaking of his will! I really loved it! thank you. -
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Thanks, you didn't think the beggining was to slow?
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Not at all, I think you built it up well, it would not have had the same effect if the begining did not have the amount of thought behind it as it does. You did a great job, and I thouroughly enjoyed reading it
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Thanks!
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