Everybody dance! Yay, I get to go to this hell-hole for a whole term!!! Wow! Amazing, right?...No. The only good thing about this place is Peter. I’ll get to see him soon. Hopefully anyway. Eep! He is waiting for me outside my dorm!!! I manage to smile, but I think I looked like a complete fool, because he starts laughing. Omgomgomg I love that laugh. 1
“What’s funny?” I frown. 2
“Oh nothing, you just look surprised to see me…” He replied smiling. We make our way out of the dorm rooms and out into the main hallway where teenagers are buzzing everywhere. I spot Mandy, and she spots me. Wow, she threw me a dirty look. I just poke my tongue at her and she flips her hair and walks away. Well, I’m already unwelcome here…amazing huh? No matter where I go, I’m always unwanted. 3
Peter looks at me, “By the way, Cam, hi!” He said and I laughed.4
“Hi, why so long to say that?” I asked still giggling.5
“I don’t know, I just forgot.” He replied and starting walking into a room.6
“Where are you going?” I asked worriedly7
“Chill, I’m going to class” I blushed majorly. I don’t even know him and I’m already paranoid when he leaves.8
“But don’t we have an assembly for all the new kids?” I didn’t want to go alone.9
“Uh, I, yeah, I’m not going. I’m just gonna~Um…cya.” He said quickly disappearing into the classroom. 10
“Uh, bye?” Strange, I don’t think he’s really the crowd to hang around, but I can’t leave him now. In the short time I’ve known him; he seems like my one and only best friend. 11
I smile to myself and walk to the assembly room, looking down at the small map my parents gave to me. 12
Still walking, I think I’m lost. 13
Something hard hits me and I fly backwards.14
“What the hell!” I say standing up in fighting mode, I don’t know why, but I just did. 15
“Whoa, whoa chill! I’m sorry; I wasn’t looking where I was going…” I looked at him frustrated as I picked my books up and realised he was as gorgeous as Peter. Ash blonde hair and blue eyes, he was very muscular for someone who was probably only my age. Why was everyone around here so gorgeous and I’m just plain old me? Totally unfair. 16
“Oh no, it was my fault. It’s okay.” I sound retarded! “Uh…okay. You’re Camilla right? News travels fast around here” He said.17
I laughed a little, “Yeah and you are?” He returned the laugh, “I’m Vic, and it’s nice to meet you. Welcome to GrayNight.”18
“Like-wise, thanks~” The bell rang for first classes. “Sorry, I have to go, nice meeting you!” I called running to class. I quickly glanced back; I could’ve sworn he was smiling at me.19
Author notes
The third chapter to my "novel" 
probably wont like it but okay...
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Lol
Camilla is childish Like moi!
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Oh I didn't read this one... But well done! It's really cool! I love your setting, and the title is great. Well done !
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Thanks
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Oh, sweet sweet conflict! Gotta love it!
Anyway, I think that this was a better chapter than the first two, cause it was "beefier", lol.
Some of the errors I noticed though...You could put the thoughts in italics or with openings so it wouldn't be so confusing. Can't say I enjoyed the chatspeak but whatever floats you boat, your story.
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Lol, thanks
I didn't notice, where is the chatspeak??? -
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Uoh, the first paragraph. "omgomgomg"
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awesome once again.l
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thank yu again...
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Okay, I enjoyed this chapter more than the first two and I can tell you why. I love to see romance and conflicts together in a story, it keeps me entertained. I like the fact that you mentioned that Vic is just as lovely as Peter, I think Vic is a werewolf but that is my guess. I also like the mystery that surrounds the three chaacters: Cam, Vic, and Peter...because now I want to know which one she ends up as just a friend and which one becomes more than that.
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thanks. I'm glad you like it.
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Hahahaha kwl!!
Wat boy is she gonna end up with?!
Can't wait for chapter 4 :-)
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thanks.
Im not tellin you find out in the next chaper
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This is again the start to amazing book. The line and concept of the story really works, a story about a new girl meeting a cute boy but goest to a nysterious schooll? Thats the book everyone loves tor read!
Now for the 'not so good' comments,
Some of your speeches like 'Something hard hits me and I fly backwards'. and some in ur first chapter you said something like 'i turn around Wow' not quite like that but do you get what i mean? It just doesnt work for me sorry.
Over than that a really amazing story if this got published in stores i will most defintly promise u to buy it and read it!!!
HSM
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thanks for the comment and tips
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