Rejected.

Well, if I gave you the WHOLE story of my sad life, then you would be crying by the end...but I can give you this little snippet...1

His name was Johnny. I had a crush on him for about a year or so, but even though I knew he didn't like me but I didn't stop liking him. We were virtually best friends -- we talked and laughed together all the time -- but one thing changed that all.2

The spring dance was coming up, and I wanted to go with Johnny so badly. Unfortunately, he did like another girl who I knew he was going to ask.3

When that girl rejected him, I had a new sense of hope -- maybe something would turn out my way. So, that night, I asked him to the dance on chat, and he said yes -- as friends. 4

So, up to the dance we would still talk all the time -- nothing would change, we were still best buddies. Nothing was awkward, we were just going to the dance together. Big whoop.5

Actually, it was a pretty big whoop for me. The guy I liked going to the dance with me was a big deal in my eyes. So, when the date of the dance came, I did my typical girl things -- curled my hair, put on a little bit of makeup, and got ready to go.6

My parents dropped me off -- with my grandparents in the car -- 10 minutes early, in hope that Johnny might arrive a little early too. But instead, when I walked in, I saw my best friends -- Marie, Lucinda, and Kylie. We socialized for a while till the music started in the auditorium and we ran in to start dancing.7

We danced, and we danced, and I did see Johnny at one point, but he completely ignored me. 8

Then, the first slow dance came.9

I think we both ran out of the auditorium -- well I know I did because I was freaked because I had never slow danced before. So, after the slow dance was done, I walked into the auditorium.10

10 minutes passed. 20 passed. 30. 40. 50. An hour passed.11

Still, Johnny wouldn't even look at me.12

About 10 minutes later, the 2nd slow dance came.13

I built up a little more confidence, staying in the room, but not going up to him and asking him. Then, I saw something that made my heart stop.14

There he was, asking someone else to dance. But it wasn't just someone.15

It was my best friend.16

Now, if she was a good friend, she wouldn't dance with him, but if I was a good friend, I would let her dance with him. This was a never-ending two way street that we had here.17

And it wasn't even the fact that he was dancing with her that bothered me.18

Right before he asked Kylie to dance, he said "I know this is going to hurt,"  and he started dancing.19

Despite knowing he was going to break my heart, he went ahead and danced with her anyways. I ran outside to cry for about 2 minutes, then I tried to compose myself so that I might be able to have a good time. Johnny walked up to me and I just ignored him.20

He offered me a piece of candy to make up, but I declined, I didn't want nor need candy. What I needed was a real apology.21

"I'm really sorry," he said slowly, "I didn't mean to hurt you."22

He didn't mean to hurt me? He even said "I know this is going to hurt" before he danced with Kylie. So, I just ignored him. And Kylie. Because they both hurt me.23

When my dad picked me up, I started to walk out calmly. Then, I pulled him off to the side in the parking lot, where I began to cry. In the background, I noticed Johnny and Kylie hesitating to walk out, just staring at me. I didn't look at them, I just kept crying into my dad's shoulder.24

I realized pretty quickly that my SUPER inquisitive grandmother would still be in the car along with my grandfather, who could probably care less.25

I sat down in the middle of the car, trying to act calm.26

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"How was the dance?" Nana asked instantly.28

"Fine." I lied.29

"Did you dance with that boy?" she questioned.30

"She doesn't want to talk about it." my dad replied.31

"Oh, I was just curious." she said smoothly, and that was the end of the conversation. 32

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My mom was in the car as well, and she was waiting to hear what happened until Nana and Papa stepped out of the car. She knew that something had gone wrong. The instant they got out of the car, I told her.34

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I could tell by the look on her face that she was upset as well. Of course, being the mother, she wants to protect me. I totally understand that. I just didn't really want to talk about it, so I let the tears flow down my cheeks.36

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I checked my email when I got home, only to be paraded by a million 'I'm sorry' emails from Johnny and Kylie. I didn't respond to any of them, I just went to sleep, unhappy that I had to see them at school tomorrow.38

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1st period: Neither one of them was in that class, so I chilled with Marie who cheered me up.40

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2nd period: Johnny and Kylie were in that class. Kylie had to sit next to me, of course, but I just ignored her till I suddenly burst out.42

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"I can't be mad at you, you're my best friend."44

She quickly hugged me and whispered "I'm sorry" in my ear.45

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I never accepted her apology though. I just hugged back. 47

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Johnny, on the other hand, didn't confront me at all. Just completely ignored me, which was nice.49

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3rd period: Neither of them were with me. Instead, I talked to the "goody-two-shoes" group. They were actually really nice. Surprising.51

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Recess: I sat with some of my friends, not Kylie, Marie, and Lucinda, other friends. They let me eat their snack with them and we just talked for 15 minutes, then the bell rang.53

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4th period: I had Spanish with Johnny. He usually sits by me, but instead he sat with all the gaming guys. They usually played video games during class. I just disregarded him and payed attention to the enlightening lesson. 55

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5th period: I was with Johnny again, who had an assigned seat next to me. He tried talking to me but I just replied "shhh, I'm trying to take notes." He nodded his head and started to take notes as well.57

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Lunch: I sat by myself, well, actually, I got Lucinda and Kylie to come over, but Kylie quickly left to sit with her new BF. Lucinda stayed for a while, then she left to sit with Kylie and the others. So, I was alone. I just ate my lunch in silence and patiently waited till the bell rang.59

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6th period: Physical education. Kylie was with me, but I didn't request to be her partner. Instead, I stuck with Marie. We practiced our lacrosse skills together, neither of us was that good. But, at least we were having some fun.61

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7th period: Since it was Thursday, I had art class. Johnny had the same class, but since we could pick our seats every time we came into class, he sat far away from me. I sat next to some of my other friends and we talked and painted till the class was over.63

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8th period: Choir. Where I sat next to Johnny while I sang. When he walked in, I didn't even peek at his face. I just kept looking at our director while we continued to warm up our voices. Johnny always does this weird thing in choir -- he'll start to look at me while we are both singing. Whenever he started to stare at me, I would put my hand up to his face. And even when I wasn't looking at him, I could see him putting his hand in my face, out of the corner of my eye. That went on till the end of choir, then school was over -- thank god.65

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At the back gate, I sat with some of my friends. They talked to me and we joked around until my dad came around. Then I hopped into the car and he asked me how my day was.67

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"It was good, I ignored Johnny, but I couldn't help but make up with Kylie."69

"Alright," he muttered slowly, obviously not pleased with my second decision.70

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The rest of the car ride was radio blasting and me singing along joyfully. 72

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Well, that's basically the story, which ended about three months ago. Kylie and I put that behind us, and after her being Johnny's GF for about 2 weeks, she dumped him. I was thankful for that, I'm glad that she let go of him. Johnny and I started to talk again, but it was never the same. I guess that we kind of reached the point of friends, but nothing more than that. Next year, I am stuck with him at a new school, so I might as well not make enemies with him. 74

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Now, it's summer break, and I haven't talked to him once. I actually just threw a surprise birthday party for Kylie, which was a blast. I'm just glad this whole thing is over and now I can move on with my life...well at least until this fall, when we are in a new school together.76

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  • EverRose
    August 4

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    AWWWW!!!!!!!! That was so sad!! I felt like I wanted to cry, lol. It was very well written, so cute, and I felt bad for her at the ending! Agh! She didn't get the boy and instead her best friend did. *head smack* Oh well. At least it was kinda happy.....lol. Anyways, I did love it, and I honestly have not critiquing for this..good for you!
    Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest! Interesting picture choice, by the way. Oh, i have one thing, you should change the font color on this, only because it make it hard to read and the neon just...well it's hard, lol. I had to highlight it but it's totally not a big deal!
    Thank once again!
    -Rose


    • neutraltint
      August 5
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      unfortunately, because of the picture coloring, this color was like the only one that I could find that would contrast alright with the storywrite settings. thanks for your comment, though!


  • Love Dreamer
    August 3
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    Good story good luck thanks for entering

  • Rockerboy
    August 3
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    ughhhh


  • angellove silver member
    August 1

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    Very detailed

    This is a very detailed account of a couple days in your life. Except what your friends look like, I have a very good picture of this trial you went through, and are still somewhat going through. You did well in how you dealt with this. Forgiveness is the only release that totally breaks the cycle of anger, regret, and lost friendships.

    Thanks for entering my contest. One thing, though. The font color made it a little difficult to read.

    God bless you.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.

  • was that a true story?sorry if it was, not that i'm insulting you or anything.sorry.
    D


  • DeniseC
    July 22

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    awwe.. Its sad and depressing to know that you two were never the same after the dancing party.. I know its hard to accept it because I had the same experience just like yours before. A boy who I loved him so much asked me to go to the prom with him in a few months ago. So I rejected two boys who also asked me for the prom. But finally I found that the boy who I loved was dating another girl and he was going to bring her to the prom either! It made me so sad..that was exactly the same experience as yours and I totally know how you feel. I know its hard to accept it at the moment, but now, we are still friends.

    I love the story, but its a little bit boring. I think you can develop more about how they knew each other and how they became best friends. It would be better.

    But still, this is a good story, and I love it. Best of luck in the contest and thanks for entering it.

    Denise


  • yin20yang
    July 17

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    Sometimes boys aren't worth it. You just have to find something that will replace him. You are an independent woman!!! Stick it to him!!


  • goodwriter
    July 14

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    wow that was long but really sad im glad you made up with ur best friend but he shouldnt be worth the bother if he was treating you like that liked ur backround also

  • liz forget him im sure one day you ll find a guy who likes u just as much as u like him


    • neutraltint
      July 14
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      I already forgot about him..and I know I will find a guy soon! and he will be WAAY better.

  • roobster98
    July 14
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    That is a brilliant story!!! Loved everything

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Para Turkey gold member
    July 14
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    that really good that happend to me but its kinda diff gr8

  • I really liked this story=] For once in my contest I got a story about best friends fighting, and I can really relate to the whole guy u like ALOT liking one of ur friends instead=[ So nice write and thx 4 entering mt contest


  • Amicus2K9
    July 13

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    Very well written....

    ...and realistic, a slice of life of school days/daze, which many of us old folk barely remember. All the social interaction, the natural process as young humans, about to set forth on their own, resolve and dissolve relationships and friendships and of course it is always painful and difficult.

    Your writing mechanics appear to be faultless and superb, well done, very well done...

    thank you for the visit and the comment...

    Amicus



  • neutraltint
    July 13
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    yeah, this was based on a real thing that happened to me!

  • This was really good, I love the story. I agree with JordanneGH, it did feel real, very real. Is this about you? I love how you could talk straight to us. Please tell us more why Johnny did what he did, other than that, great! Keep writing =)


  • JordanneGH
    July 13

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    I enjoyed it

    I enjoyed it,
    It felt like a real story
    as I went along
    and this was real?
    Dear me.
    Anyway-
    You'll have to update this very often-
    BECAUSE I WANT MORE, no i dont want,I NEED,
    Anywho. REALLY GOOD.

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