He ran from the cemetery. Luckily, no one was there at that time to see. It had taken him months to dig his way out and he wasn't a pleasant sight. His clothes were rotting from his body and his flesh was falling from his bones, but he was free and he had an agenda.1
Jason had suspected that his wife and his younger brother were plotting against him, but had no proof. He had visited a strange Medicine man with a very disturbing reputation and requested his aid. The man had 'read' his future and assured him he had a right to be wary.2
His wife and brother, indeed had plans to kill him and take over his very substantial estate. He could not for-tell how or when they planned his demise, but assured him he could aid him in getting even with them from beyond the grave if they succeeded. At first, the idea did not appeal to him, then he thought about it a bit more. His wife was not aware that he had been diagnosed with Cancer and given less than a year to live. He could change his will, but had no one else to leave his wealth to. They would probably be able to challenge the will and have it overturned after his death. 3
No, the only way he could truly be sure they paid for their betrayal was to take the Medicine man's advice and destroy them after his death. The man explained that he could give him a special potion that would give him six months of reanimation after his death. He would have that long to escape from his grave and exact his revenge. Jason returned home that evening, planning how he would get even. The Medicine Man explained that he would feel no pain for the six months it would take for his body to decay and since he was in constant, unrelenting pain now, it would be a welcome relief.4
Jason decided to let them carry out their plot, which they did within three days. He would kill them in the same manner they used. 5
After a nice dinner with his wife, Jason stood up and felt woozy. 6
"Help me, Priscilla," he begged, but she just stood there watching as he collapsed.7
'She put something in my drink,' is the last thought he had as he fell to the floor.8
Hours later, he regained consciousness and it was pitch dark. He couldn't move. Jason realized he was dead, because he felt no fear, nor pain, even after he realized he was buried in the ground. They had set their own fate. Jason slowly started clawing at the lid of his casket. He had no concept of time and worked steadily.9
Priscilla and Ryan were enjoying the good life. 10
"It all worked out so perfectly," Priscilla said, as she poured Ryan a glass of wine.11
"Yeah, he got exactly what was coming to him. But it was really nice of him to leave you everything," he laughed. "He was so unsuspecting. I can't believe, he didn't have a clue."12
Priscilla frowned. "I believe he was starting to get suspicious toward the end."13
"What make you think that?" asked Ryan. 14
"Just before he passed out, he had a weird smile on his face, and I heard him whisper, 'As you sow, so shall you reap.'"15
"What kind of nonsense is that?" asked Ryan.16
Priscilla shuttered, "I don't know, but it really creeped me out."17
Ryan just laughed and said, "There is nothing he can do to hurt us now. He is six feet under and we have it all."18
Jason was gone and they had moved into his mansion and taken over his wealth. Both were feeling smug. It had been so easy. He had been ill anyway, and no one was shocked when he died suddenly. It had been more than two months since his death and they were quite happy with themselves as they toasted each other on their success. The couple started upstairs to the master bedroom and were having a private celebration when Priscilla heard a strange noise downstairs.19
Ryan reached into the drawer by the bed and pulled out a gun. He stood there waiting as they heard footsteps coming up the stairs. He pointed the gun at the door as it slowly opened...and they both screamed at the apparition standing in the doorway. Ryan emptied his gun at the decaying figure of Jason standing there, but to no effect. He kept approaching. Priscilla fainted as Jason took the gun and hit Ryan in the head.20
Hours later, the couple awoke in a dark, crowded box. Feeling around, they realized they were sharing a coffin. The lid was collapsed in and dirt trickling through. The air was getting thin as they both started clawing at the broken lid of their coffin.
A contest entry
- Fantabulously Flashy Flash Fiction by Asfand.
135 points, ended July 26, 17 entries
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Comments
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OHHH Creepy! this is my worst nightmare. I'm clausterphobic... Love the tale.. Very well written and it flow wonderfully.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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Interesting concept. Actually, very interesting concept - the idea is unique, well-formed and original. For the most part, it was well-written too, with little to no MISTAKES ... however, for me and my taste, the execution does not do justice to the imagination you used ... I would suggest this be played out more like a scene than anything (as you meant it to be flash fiction) because this way, it seemed rushed.
Para 6 to 9 - should these not use HAD --> Jason a nice dinner .... Jason HAD stood up etc, since he is narrating the PAST ... or perhaps, if this is to be an individual flashback, you could italicize or something.
Anyway, sorry if this seemed rather harsh, but this is a terrific concept and for most part - a terrific piece too, just some parts that COULD be reworked ...
Good luck! Thanks a lot for your entry!

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P11 you have Jason, when I think you meant to put Ryan in :
Also I was wondering about these line. 'Hours later, he regained consciousness and it was pitch dark. He couldn't move. Jason realized he was dead, because he felt no fear, nor pain, even after he realized he was buried in the ground.'
I am wondering because usually it takes awhile to be embalmed and such and then buried. I think you timeline is off a bit.
But other then that, it was a fab write. Good luck in the contest.
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Thanks Brooke
I made the corrections and thank you.
Trish
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Gruesome way to end it all. If Jason could get out so can his wife and her lover. Not sure about this one Trish. Well constructed right up to the ending. I would have quietly poisoned the pair of them and leave the local police to find out how.


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Sorry Bob
This wasn't quite as sweet as the last one, but it was written as flash fiction for a content that had to start with the words, He ran from the Cemetary.
No, the wife and brother won't escape the grave. They did not have the reanimation potion that Jason had to give him six months to escape and exact his revenge.
Sorry, you never know what to expect from one of my little stories.
Trish
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Good story Tricia. Welcome back.


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Cool story, well written, nicely typed, well done indeed!
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