Truth Can Be Kind

TRUTH CAN BE KIND 7-8-20091

The last few months have been a trial.2

I betrayed you, I lost my desire.3

I thought I could lie for a little while.4

I refused to I throw you into my fire.5

Truth is no luxury that I depend upon.6

The truth, I must face, and then try to move on.7

I love you my dear, no matter how8

I expose myself. I let it out now.9

Expressing desire is easy, yet hard.10

Struck by lightening, I feel a slight spark.11

New hope becomes important to me,12

a long way away, some meaning to see.13

You are the one I can't live without.14

You believe this too, I haven't a doubt.15

What I express, you understand.16

I’m wilting without you in a barren land.17

Don't wait too long to be with me.18

Life is a tide from an endless sea. 19

I will find you and 20

you will surely find me. 21

If that is how you want it to be.22

If not, then please let go of me.23

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  • BlackTide
    September 7

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    nice work on this! its sweet and well-written, good work writing this poem!


  • Elisabeth gold member
    July 11
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    Beautifully written, Susan.

    Lis.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • sjhunt gold member
      July 25
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      Again, thank you

      Thank you, Lis. It's nice to know that somewhere in the ethers, there is someone who cares.


    • sjhunt gold member
      July 12
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      Also, Thank you for the compliment. I've had some major difficulties but things are getting better...

    • sjhunt gold member
      July 12
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      Thank you, Lis. I've been depressed and haven't been online much because I don't want to spread it around. Last night I was uploading the new version of Demise, Now Named 'Mine Has Been No Ordinary Life'. I uploaded the prologue and first chapter. It never fails to upload improperly, so I have to edit the spacing which is a total hassle. I got through about ninety percent of it and hit a wrong key somehow, don't even know which one, and the whole thing disappeared. So I said F-It!

      I'll try again but what a pain. It's quite different. It follows a different timeline and I have an ally.


      If you'd like to read the first 3 chapters, I could send them to you. If you want. I don't know if I like it or not yet.

      I stepped on a cactus a few weeks ago and it has really taken its toll on me...

      Love Susan

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